I just need someone to quickly check for grammar errors and content.
I had the essay finished and checked by my English teacher, but I can't find it. It was similar to this one just better :P
Prompt: What matters to you, and why?
What matters to me? My bag matters to me. Why does my bag matter to me? Simply put, my bag carries the things I need, the things that matter to me the most. What matters to me is not the bag itself, but what the bag represents.
My bag is a direct result of the experiences and cultures I have come in contact with. Inside one can find a U.S. Government Textbook, the book 'El Nombre del Viento' in Spanish, and even a green calculator I bought during my year in France. My bag, much like myself, is a product of what has made its way inside it. A unique mixture of cultures and contrasting ideas come together to form a single object, a single person.
My bag is a representation of the things that matter to me the most. Inside can be found reminders of my family: my brother's sweater, my sister's English Literature binder, and even a neatly packed lunch made by my mother and father. Everything that is of importance and has a place in my heart can be found inside.
My bag is important to me because it is me. It's a reflection of my life and proof that different ideas from different places can come together and form a cohesive whole. Everything found in my bag can be found in me, and will remain with me for the rest of my life.
Deadline is in a few days, so any answers will be extremely helpful. Thanks in advance!!!
JoseCollege
What matters to me? My bag matters to me. Why does my bag matter to me? Simply put, my bag carries the things I need, the things that matter to me the most. What matters to me is not the bag itself, but what the bag represents.i dont think you need to say this b/c the reader can gather that conclusion from reading it -- which is a good thing!
My bag is a direct result of the experiences and cultures I have come in contact with. Inside one -- i think you can just say "you" can find a U.S. Government Textbook, the book 'El Nombre del Viento' in Spanish, and even a green calculator I bought during my year in France. My bag, much like myself, is a product of what has made its way inside it. A unique mixture of cultures and contrasting ideas come together to form a single object, a single person.
My bag is a representation of the things that matter to me the most. Inside can be found reminders of my family: my brother's sweater, my sister's English Literature binder, and even a neatly packed lunch made by my mother and father. Everything that is of importance and has a place in my heart can be found inside.
My bag is important to me because it is me. It's a reflection of my life and proof that different ideas from different places can come together and form a cohesive whole. Everything found in my bag can be found in me, and will remain with me for the rest of my life.
overall I really liked it and how you made one object that obviously does matter to you into something about your whole life and your culture!
