I took a little different approach on the roommate note, let me know what I can do to improve this.
Future Friend,
Hard-boiled eggs should not be heated in the microwave, at least not without perforation, or a shield. I found out the hard way. My mom always told me that breakfast is the most important meal of the day. But when extracurricular activities and school work began to pile up, I frequented tiresome nights of homework and studying. Breakfast became rare occurrences. To rectify this problem, my mom cooked hard-boiled eggs ahead of time that I could quickly devour before rushing out the door.
One morning, after a late night of studying for AP US History and not getting nearly enough rest, I dragged myself down to the kitchen. Half asleep, I began my usual routine. Grab bowl. Open fridge. Take out egg. Open microwave. Put bowl with egg in. 25 seconds. Beep. Beep. Done. Mindlessly, I took the egg out and jabbed my fork into it without realizing that I'd forgotten to puncture it prior to heating. Next thing I knew, my egg exploded. Pieces of egg stuck to my face and landed everywhere. I stood there dazed until my mom's frantic footsteps on the stairs awoke me from my trance. Now somewhat functioning, I began to explain to my mom that in all my haste, I had forgotten to perforate the egg which allowed the pressure inside to build up and lead to the explosion. Bemused, she told me to take the day off; it was obvious that I had been overworking myself.
Later, the more I thought about it the more I realized that, like the egg, my blunder was caused by the stress that I had amassed the weeks prior without creating a hole for the pressure to escape. I'm reminded of this incident as we enter Stanford because I know we will inevitably face a great deal of pressure during our time here. I hope that in the absence of our families, we'll look out for each other, making sure neither one of us becomes too overwhelmed that we forget to take a moment here and there to just stop, relax, and enjoy our time at Stanford.
P.S Let's stick with waffles for breakfast instead.
I think your essay reads fine. I liked the first version already. If there's anything I would add, its your preferences in habits and room-mate familyhood. Also interests besides sports and subsistence/survival. Any watch-out pet peeves, any absolute taboos that you wil not accept? Any obsessions or dislikes? You need to fess up here... Also, you strengths, your joys (like do you like to whistle or sing, go out for late-nite pizza, see old movies, listen to jazz?) BE a human live person here in this essay, you are asked and encouraged to!!
