Would love if u can correct me on my personal statement..i feel it is quite dull and lacks emotion...please edit anything you find out of order...lacking sense .grammatical errors..etc..and add sumthing that would make it stand out..thank you
Prompt :why you want to do the course, and why you've chosen this particular university to apply to
(im not sure about the 'why have u chosen this particular uni' my agent asked me to submit just one =s ..nyw do clarify..thank y
I have been impelled towards Chemical Engineering for a very simple but significant reason: my love for chemistry and mathematics. Chemical Engineering appeals to me because of the challenges involved in the application of scientific theory to practical, real world problems such as how to deal with nuclear waste. My interest towards pursuing engineering as a career came on a trip to India, where I stayed with my cousin who himself is an engineer. He made me aware that in today's world chemical engineering has an increasingly important role across a wide range of industries from pharmaceuticals to petrochemicals. I then began to do research and found that chemical engineering is involved in the research and development of new products that involve the interaction of chemical compounds with a number of different types of materials.Strength and determination are characteristics I possess which I believe will help me to extend my understanding of chemical engineering. Of course the huge demand and high remuneration have also played a major role in my interest.
A great source of adding to my basic knowledge of engineering was science A-levels which improved my understanding. My deep passion for Statistics and Mathematics and their application to real life have also been governing factors in my interest which has been nurtured by my A'Level subjects which include Pure Applied Mathematics with specialization in Biology and Chemistry. Mathematics also required me to take a practical approach and logically evaluate situations. Chemistry and Physics taught me that I was particularly interested in the practical aspects of science. It is because I find chemistry so fascinating and the idea of chemical engineering so appealing that I have chosen to follow chemical engineering as a future career path. The AS level program taught me the importance of time management, personal organisation, and being prepared both physically and mentally.
In terms of pastimes, swimming is my favourite. It helps alleviate stress and keeps me fit. I enjoy playing billiards and computer games. These have improved my mental concentration and my hand-eye coordination. This in turn has helped me to improve my manual dexterity, which is required in my chosen profession. My general knowledge is stimulated by the many books such as Shakespeare's 'Julius Caesar', Paulo Coelho's 'Veronika decides to die'and 'Life of Pi' by Yann Martel enjoy reading and like many people, music is my first love, in particular techno and trance music. During high school, I volunteered at a school for the disabled. This was truly an experience that changed me as my degree of patience, and understanding greatly improved due to the work I did with my autistic peer buddy. Other work experiences included working at Real Estate exhibitions, which taught me to better my communication skills in order to convince people to buy property.
I would like to pursue my university education in Australia as its universities boast of world class excellence, having been pioneers in many fields. Entry to university in Australia would help me to gain both valuable work experience, and improve my grasp of Australian culture. I will also learn to work as part of a team, to communicate effectively with multicultural people and to develop the practical skills and intellectual abilities I need for global success. I look forward to this experience and also to the rewards and challenges of higher education.
The first paragraph is solid. The last one seems to be a bit off-topic, unless there was more to the prompt than you posted. As to dealing with the why this university part, usually you would research the particular university you wanted to attend, and see what they pride themselves most on. Then you could craft a response that fed into what they were looking for.
can u help me correct it for grammatical or other errors atleast..=( I definetly feel theres a lot of error. =/ ...i would go about fixing the second paragraph right now..thanks =)
It is because I find chemistry so fascinating and the idea of chemical engineering so appealing, that I have chosen to follow it as a future career path.
My general knowledge is stimulated by the many books such as Shakespeare's 'Julius Caesar', Paulo Coelho's 'Veronika decides to die'and 'Life of Pi' by Yann Martel. I enjoy reading, but like many people, music is my first love, in particular techno and trance music.
This is great, it sounds as if any shcool would be luck to have you as a student!
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