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Statement of Purpose UT TRANSFER CHEMICAL ENGINEERING


zula 1 / 2  
Sep 13, 2010   #1
THIS IS MY SoP, I WANTED TO SEE WHERE I COULD IMPROVE. THANKS

I have moved so many times, I don't think I can even remember the names of all the schools I've been in. From the US, to Canada, to Mexico, to Spain; I've never really been able to answer the question, where are you from? The longest I have ever stayed anywhere has been 5 years.

I always hated moving, I couldn't stand saying goodbye, it felt like I was leaving a little part of me behind; but now after so many goodbyes and so many experiences' in different countries, I am grateful to have been able to grow up in so many different cultures. I am sure I would not be the same person I am today if my life had been any different.

All the people I've met, the strange holidays I've celebrated, the different foods I have tasted, have taught me that we live in a very diverse world; every community, city, state, country and continent has something unique about it. It amazes me how everyone is different, but people from the same country or community have the same principles. I like to believe I have taken a little of these beliefs and principles from everywhere I've been and that this strange combination makes me who I am.

When they ask me what nationality I am, I always proudly say I am an American, though I never truly understand exactly what it means. I love my country, but I love all the other countries I have lived in just as much. It may sound strange but my love towards the countries I have lived is what developed my interest in chemical engineering.

"Treat the earth well, it was not given to you by your parents. It was loaned to you by your children." - Kenyan Proverb. We live in a beautiful world, with amazing things everywhere you go, but a great part of the population is only concerned with preserving it long enough for them to live there lives or maybe even there children, which I believe is selfish.

I am deeply concerned about the ecological consequences we are facing because of all our production and consumption. We are on the right path towards sustainable development; there are a lot more fuel-efficient cars, many solar panels being used for energy, and a lot more recycling going on than a few years back, but there is a lot more to be accomplished.

Chemistry can be applied in many different fields such as water treatment, energy efficiency, renewable resources, preventing contamination and many others. The truth is I am extremely interested in all these fields. I am convinced that they are what will lead me towards reaching my goals, which are to preserve our ecosystem the best way possible and to conserve our planet in livable conditions as long as possible.

ershad193 14 / 337 5  
Sep 14, 2010   #2
able to answer the question: "Where are you from?" -- put the question in quotes

The longest I have ever stayed anywhere has beenwas 5 years. -- I'm not sure about this suggestion. By the way, spell out small numbers like "five."

I couldn't stand saying goodbyes -- plural

preserving it long enough for them to live their lives or maybe even their children

Chemistry can be applied in many different fields such as water treatment, energy efficiency, renewable resources, preventing contamination and many others.

Don't make obvious statements. Give a unique insight into the applications of the subject.

The truth is I am extremely interested in all these fields.

Really?...that's fine, but to an AO that may seem like you don't have a lot of knowledge about your chosen field. A lack of knowledge is often one of the reasons for the generic choices. I don't mean to offend you, and I'm not implying that you have any lack of knowledge in chemical engineering. I just want to point out the different impressions your statement can make.

Moreover, you have not included even a single sentence which is specific to the field of chemical engineering.
Use your research, and say some unique and specific things about chemical engineering. What is it that really attracted you towards this branch? What do you want to become after you graduate?

Read this thread: Engineers can turn ideas into reality.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Sep 16, 2010   #3
It may sound strange but my love towards the countries I have lived is what developed my interest in chemical engineering.

This is a great theme.

Your intro paragraph is boring because it is too general. I think you can make it excellent by introducing the theme of chemistry up there in the intro. It is great, because you are a product of chemistry. You were mashed up with mortar and pestle, and you were dissolved into a solution. Get inspired as you dig deep to find a brilliant way to discuss the chemistry experiment that gave rise to your action plan -- your professional goals.


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