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(PERSONAL STATEMENT) Write a letter to your future self to read on your graduation day.


im da one 1 / 1  
Dec 11, 2019   #1
Hello and thank you in advance for reading my essay and helping me reach my goals. If you have any suggestions (sentence length punctuations emotion) comment them below. Here is the full subject:

WRITE A LETTER TO YOUR FUTURE SELF TO READ ON YOUR GRADUATION DAY. DESCRIBE WHAT YOU HOPE TO GAIN OVER THE COURSE OF YOUR STUDIES AND FROM YOUR EXPERIENCE AT THIS UNIVERSITY? *Russian speaking uni computer science*

CONGRATULATIONS, you finally did it! It has been a long journey, hasn't it? It all started when you and your family came from countryA to countryB in September of 20-- in pursuit of better education and a better life. After you arrived and settled in, you wanted to attend the High School you signed up for before migrating, but the classes were delayed for 3 months because the embassy designated teachers couldn't come. The school had to hire university students for the classes to begin. The lack of teachers combined with the delay got you down, but you picked your self back up and studied hard for every exam; when the academic year ended, you passed your diploma exam with flying colors at the top of your class.

The early admissions deadline passed by the time you found out about universityname, so you planned to apply for the regular admissions. No places were available for the SAT exam, but the waitlist was open, so you signed up for it. On test day, however, there were no places available. All seemed lost, still, you didn't give up and wanted to give the rolling deadline a try. By the time the results were announced seats for the SAT were full again but the ACT had open seats. Once again you enlisted but were denied; it was so heartbreaking for us but there was no use crying about it.

You didn't want to sit around and waste time, therefore, you found a job and after two months of training, you started working to help your family. You set your mind on the early admissions for 20-- and aimed to improve your math score and your essays. Sometime after submitting your application, the results came back and you did it! After submitting your application, you started going to a Russian language class to communicate better with people and a python class because you were curious and excited about learning what made it the most popular programming language.

The eight years you strived to get your master's degree has made you more sociable and has equipped you with skills that will prove extremely useful in your life. You now think more critically, formulate original ideas, and are an improved team player. You built long-lasting friendships, learned exciting new skills, and discovered hidden potential along the way. Remember where you came from; because today the journey continues.

StChibuzor 2 / 2  
Dec 12, 2019   #2
Your essay ended well @im da one, but you should pay attention to your use of punctuation marks and 'what you hope to gain over the course of your studies.
OP im da one 1 / 1  
Dec 12, 2019   #3
Thank you very for answering. I will try my best to fix them and add a bit more to what I hope to gain paragraph.


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