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My Yale application is due tomorrow and I just wanted someone to look over my answers one last time before I submit it. Be as harsh as you need to be!

What in particular about Yale has influenced your decision to apply? (Please answer in 100 words or less.)

Standing in front of Sterling library. Feeling the crisp December air breeze through my hair, infused with centuries of rich history. The same air breathed by thousands of brilliant, world-changing minds. Looking around at the students walking to class, knowing that every one of them was a new idea, that every person I saw had the potential to enlighten every life they touched.

Please respond in 150 characters (roughly 25 words) or fewer to each of the questions below:

You have been granted a free weekend next month. How will you spend it?

Falling down the rabbit hole, joining Bilbo on his unexpected journey, partying with Gatsby until sunrise, and making it home in time for dinner.

What is something about which you have changed your mind in the last three years?

The place religion has in my life and the power it holds over my beliefs and opinions.

What is the best piece of advice you have received while in high school?

"Be a leader, not a ruler."

What do you wish you were better at being or doing?

I wish I was better at public speaking. The second I step in front of a group of people, my brain shuts down, leaving my mouth to ramble.

What is a learning experience, in or out of the classroom, that has had a significant impact on you?

Visiting the outskirts of Cabo San Lucas and seeing miles of cardboard homes and barefoot children. Yet there was a smile on every child's face.

Hi,

I really like your short answers. They are creative and down-to-earth at the same time.
I didn't catch any grammar mistakes in your first response, but it's meant to be more of a "stream of consciousness" sort of essay, so grammar doesn't really apply anyway.

Overall, I like it :)

I'm not sure, but meybe you should be more specific with your "why Yale" answer. I read somewhere that respond, that can fits many universities can harm your application more than help it. But on the other side it is nice written.