I tried to be unique with this, I'm not sure how it turned out though. Be tough!
Dear Future Roommate,
Seeing as we will likely be spending a lot of time together for the next four years, you might as well get to know a little bit about Steve Prefontaine. No, my name is not Steve Prefontaine. Pre, however, is my hero and source of inspiration. Pre, like me, was a runner. Although I will never make it to the Olympics like he did, you may think I am training for Rio after a few double-digit mile runs at seemingly random times of day (or night). However much I may be obsessed with running, I take Pre's attitude beyond running and apply it to how I live.
My favorite Pre quote is "To give anything less than your best is to sacrifice the gift," so do not be surprised if you see me wearing my favorite shirt that has that quote on the back. But do know that I am going to give whatever it is we are doing together one-hundred percent. So whether it is a late-night cram session for that big test tomorrow, or cheering on the Red Sox, I will be giving it my all. Considered yourself warned that watching a baseball game with me can get intense.
You are probably thinking to yourself, "Oh great, a runner. I'm going to be stuck with a health nut!" Do not worry; I've been known to sneak in a Big Mac and Mello Yello on more than one occasion. Just be prepared for large portioned pasta dishes; running makes me hungry. Yes, I do give one-hundred percent on eating. You'll know what I mean if once you see how much I can eat!
I am sure that we are going to have plenty of good times during the next four years. Maybe after forcing you to watch Without Limits and some pleading, you will join me on a few runs.
Luke Kicklighter
i think you may have focused on running a bit too much here. admissions officers want to get to know you, not what you like to do or how much/what you eat.
focus on why you like to run. does it help you think and contemplate life? do you like to be in control and have knowledge that you can go anywhere you want on your runs?
try to emphasize the YOU in running, rather than simply showing it as one of your hobbies. i think you have a start with the quote, but maybe analyze it a bit more and explain how and why it applies to you.
at the moment, the essay is a bit too broad, let them know about YOU
