Stony Brook med supplement - The ideal physician

Hi, This is my essay for the Stony Brook supplement and I would appreciate all comments concerning grammar and how well I answered the question. This is due at 12 am so I'd appreciate the quick response. Thank you in advance.

Due date: 1/15/2012
Paint a verbal portrait of an ideal physician (or dentist) and tell us about the experiences that you have had which have helped to shape this ideal.

As I begin to conjure an image of the ideal physician in my mind, I picture a person who has a gentle appearance and a pleasant countenance. It is someone whose brain is beaming with intelligence and wisdom. It is a person who has the nickname "problem solver" or "life-saver", and never neglects their patients even after closing time. To me that is my image of the ideal physician.

The pleasant countenance of a physician is an asset that helps him comfort others. During my volunteer experience, there has been many times where I have seen people walk in dejected. They are worried sick about their children and some parents even begin to cry. When they come in to see the doctor, the doctor is always smiling. He checks up on the child, and he tells the parents not to worry. He smiles and he says things like "Your child is better than me and you" and he tries to make the parents lighten up. This is the type of countenance a physician needs in order to help comfort their patients and those around them.

As for a doctor' intelligence and wisdom, they are needed to help the doctor make decisions that can play a huge role in a patient's life. The doctor goes through eight or more years of training in order to become a physician and it is this type of accumulated knowledge that helps a doctor solve the problems of others. They are knowledgeable people and great translators. They translate their scientific knowledge into words that patients can better understand and for this type of job you need a person who is knowledgeable and wise. This is why I try my best to study hard in order to become a successful physician

The last and most important aspect of my image of the ideal physician is a physician's kind heart that desires to solve the problems of others. Physicians are presented with new cases every day, and it is up too them to find solutions and methods to enhance treatment. Whether it is cancer or a small fever, doctors are always there to provide treatment to their patients. They are the problem solvers that can make a huge difference in one's life. They are also the type of people who don't neglect a person's request for treatment even after closing time. There have been many instances during my volunteer experience where patients come when we are closing the doors. The doctor is not happy with the fact that they come very late, but nonetheless he does not reject their request for treatment.

These are the qualities that I find in my portrait of an ideal physician. They are hardworking, pleasant looking, knowledgeable, life-savers that are always trying their best to help their patients. This is the type of physician I hope to become. The type of physician that is able to make a difference and bring joy to patients and their families.

I am bumping this for you, and pretty good essay. I liked the word choice. Very nicely written and nice organization.
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any comments on grammar mistakes or somethin else? i only got 3 hours to submit

You can make the last paragraph stronger with more details and enthusiasm.
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