Two hours a day, six days a week, the bottom of my feet meet face to face with cement, pavement, dirt, or the treadmill. Every person has their own haven to cope with stress and the pressures of life, and mine comes from the euphoria that only running can provide. It's as beneficial to my body as it is to my mood. I can enjoy (and indulge) all of my favorite foods and running will keep me in shape.
With every step, my feet leave behind any worries or pains I have on the pavement. Running is my form of meditation, as it lets me think clearly and deeply. The distractions in my life seem to fade away, and my mind wanders to wherever it wants to. Instead of worrying about school, I concentrate on my breathing patterns; Rather than stressing over how high my grades are, I rhythmically coordinate my steps.
Everyone has an outlet to deal with emotions. My outlet is running. The mind-clearing effect running generates cannot be reached any other way. Sometimes I really push my running to the extremes, but I always see a method to my madness. It's my calm during a storm, my sanity amongst chaos. I can truly say that I am hooked on running. I crave that feeling that overwhelms your body when you use up every ounce of energy, and running provides that sense of total, complete, accomplishment.
It's very very good. It's probably better than the other essays I have read about running, but it is kind of redundant. Your descriptions are amazing; however, many people share the same sentiments, experience, and ideas as you. Perhaps add a little nuance and personal stuff to it.
but good job ^__^
could u look at mine
The essay seems good to me. The transitions from the paragraphs and the way you started the essay was good. The topic "some interest of yours that UIUC should know about as part of admission process" matches with the description of your essay. I think you could add a little more kick to it, like the essay is a bit monotonous or bland. But all in all, nice writing :D
