Strong commitment ,Research;U Michigan-School of Nursing/Unique qualities

I was weak and prone to illness throughout my childhood. Whether it was a bad flu, severe heartburn or near-death malaria, I constantly visited the hospital. As far as I could remember, whenever I was bed-ridden from my illness, my mother seemed to always find a way to nurse me back to health. The image of her feeding me a bowl of soup seems to have always had a special place in my heart and inspired me to be someone just as caring, influential and compassionate.

With the help of University of Michigan and specifically the School of Nursing, I will be able to accomplished one thing I have always dreamed of, discover and advocate the vision, values and mission of excellent nursing profession. I am particularly interested in the school's strong commitment to advancing the practice of nursing through research. Research is very vital to our everyday decision making but especially in the medical field. It amazes me how everyday researchers are expanding our knowledge on things that are very beneficial to our lives. In the medical field, research is necessary to help us learn more about the complexity of the human body and what we could do to allow ourselves to be healthy as possible.

Another way the School of Nursing matches my interests is its clinical practice. I truly believe excellence takes practice and through clinical practice promoted by the School of Nursing, I would be equipped with all the skills and training required to be an innovative professional nurse. Research on its own will not bring results without action.

The University of Michigan School of Nursing possesses qualities that best support my interests and what I feel will be the best environment for me to continue my higher education. I know I will thrive in the positive, influential environment the School of Nursing has to offer.

Feel free to critique!!! Any edits would be appreciated.

I feel this sentence does not add much value to your flow.... the next few lines dont seem to have any reference to hospitals :(


I would be able to accomplish


I don't see much meaning in the highlighted part... why do you say research is very vital to everyday life? You talked about their strong committment to research. Now something more about their research capabilities.


The school's clinical practice is another feature that draws my attention.