I could hear the engine working harder as I pressed upon the accelerator till I couldn't anymore.
I don't know if this is a good sentence to include. It makes it sound like you were speeding, which is seriously irresponsible given the number of auto fatalities each year. So... it makes you look bad to the reader!
I didn't know what I wanted to do with my life. ----This also does not help. I don't want to have eyou be dishonest, ut it is probably good to tell the reader some good, impressive things.
The detail about the skunk seems arbitrary.
Not because I thought I was going to die but because I thought my mom was going to take each and every single one of my privileges away.---Ahh! Terrible! What about the deer? You really are batting zero when it comes to writing an essay that will impress the reader.
Alright, the bottom line is that the essence of this essay could be conveyed with just two sentences: I wrecked my mom's car and thought she would punish me severely, but she was compassionate. From this I learned ________... and continue the essay from here. All the rest of what you have written makes a bad impression! Sorry to be critical. :-)