In addition to curriculum, grades and activities, Dickinson's Admissions Committee looks for purpose, potential and self-reflection. Explain why you have chosen to apply to Dickinson and how your interests, talents and goals fit with Dickinson's distinctive character.
I grew up in a school system where student faculty connection is of paramount importance. This approach was not only effective but also helped me to learn with ease. Dickinson College has 10 to 1 student faculty ratio, which makes it unique. It has been my dream to study in such system even after school, and to me Dickinson is a 'dream come true'. I believe this methodology will help me to grow individually academically and intellectually.
I have found Business Studies a valuable subject, ever since I started studying it in O level, which has blessed me with the power of planning. One of my duties, as the Head Boy of school, is to plan and manage school events, get-togethers and field trips. Now the time has come to grow, beyond school life, and learn practically. The study of businesses and corporations need much more than view points and planning. Dickinson is known for its curriculum and International Business program. I want to think globally and understand how to bring different cultures together. My dream can only be fulfilled if I pursue my studies at Dickinson.
I grew up in a school system where student faculty connection
iswas of paramount importance. This approach [explicity state what this approach was towards? the staff?] was not only effective but also helped me to learn with ease. Dickinson College has a 10 to 1 student faculty ratio, which makes it unique. It has been my dream to study in such a system even after school...
I believe this methodology will help me to grow individually, academically, and intellectuallyHow?/Why? .
... ever since I started studying it in O levelwhat is this? , which has blessed ...
I think your 2nd paragraph doesn't connect well. It just jumps from different topics.
Wish you luck!