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Student politics to Event-planning ; Western Ivey AEO-My uniqueness


mayfl0wer 6 / 48  
Jan 15, 2013   #1
The ideal Ivey HBA student has a wide range of interests, perspectives, and life experiences. Describe the uniqueness you have brought as a student to your high school based on your own interests, perspectives, and life experiences. Please be concise and respond using 250 words or less in your answer.

'You will not be taken seriously. You must wait until you grow up.' Growing up, having my initiative cut by adults was daunting, yet the feeling of being told I was inadequate because of my age made me realize the need for youth to make a difference.

Throughout high school, I have consistently provided a voice to my peers. In Grade 9, as a Grade Rep on my Student Council, I implemented a 'suggestion box' at school and gathered ideas to hold acoustic performances and runway shows. In Grade 10, I became the president of the Semi-Formal Committee, and through a voting system that allowed students to decide everything from themes to music, I ensured that by taking everyone's opinion, we were able to execute a successful night.

As the Public Board Council President of the Ontario Student Trustees' Association (OSTA), I represent over 1.2 million Ontario students. After students expressed their discontent with school cafeterias, I along with the OSTA Executive, launched Stickit, a national campaign to boycott fast food. After newspapers launched us into the spotlight, we met with corporate companies that supplied food to Ontario schools and at the moment, are discussing price reductions with Aramark to make cafeteria food more affordable.

In the past four years, I have been a proactive advocate of student voice through all my interests, from student politics to event-planning to youth leadership. Issues can be overwhelming, but to challenge these problems, both young and old must be involved. I realize that in the midst of the adult dominated world, students can be the drivers of change. We have a voice and we do not have to wait.
hannahsarch 2 / 17  
Jan 15, 2013   #2
I've always been told by my English teachers not to start with a quote because it can come off as unoriginal so you could try;

Growing up, initiative was plentiful but such cutting words from adults like, 'You will not be taken seriously. You must wait until you grow up' made me hesitate. Yet, the feeling of being told I was inadequate because of my age gave me reason to become a changing force, any way I could.

This is a rather long sentence
In Grade 10, I became the president of the Semi-Formal Committee. I ensured that we were able to execute a successful night through a voting system that allowed students to decide everything from themes to music.

Again sort of long, and i changed the second 'launched'.
After students expressed discontent with school cafeterias, I launched Stickit, a national campaign to boycott fast food. With the help of the OSTA Executive I learned ______through our joint efforts in Stickit. After newspapers projected us into the spotlight, we met with corporate companies that supplied food to Ontario schools, and at the moment, are discussing price reductions with Aramark to make cafeteria food more affordable.

I like how you brought it full circle by contrasting your last sentence with the first, it makes it end on a good note.

Just suggestions :)
OP mayfl0wer 6 / 48  
Jan 16, 2013   #3
PLEASE HELP!!! Due this afternoon!
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jan 16, 2013   #4
You have answered it very well and nothing to worry about :)
I see you have loads of points to show that you are possess a unique character. You have presented all those points very well and very creatively. So, go ahead and submit.... In my view, this is really good!

Growing up, having my initiatives cut by adults was daunting

Good Luck!


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