Please write a short response (of 500- 1000 words) answering the following questions. In your response, consider what strengths you might bring to the program and why the Exploration Seminar program to which you are applying would want to have you along as a student and member of the group.
why did you pick this program in particular?
how does this program suit your academic goals?
how does this program suit your personal interests?
in what ways will you contribute to the a) academic, b) cultural and c) group experiences?
what do you hope to learn and gain from this experience?
I'M REALLY DISORGANIZED RIGHT NOW I NEED HELP CLARIFYING WHAT I WANT TO SAY AND OVERALL HOW I CAN IMPROVE. THANK YOU!
Nepal, small but exotic and having the eight out of ten tallest mountains in the world, was a way too amazing of an opportunity for me to just pass by. As a Nepal proverb says, "opportunity comes but does not linger."
This exploration seminar provides two paradoxical elements of which I value dearly. At first the global health aspect about the seminar had caught my attention but finding out about the chance to go to Himalayas turned my aspiration to desperation to attend this trip.
I imagine myself working in a global health care system as a doctor someday. I'm a chemistry and anthropology (medical anthropology and global health track) major. I have only recently gained interest in global health. I got an exposure at the career fair and the conferences which I have attended and which I hope to engage in more by attending coming up National Undergraduate Bioethics Conference and Western Regional International Health Conference. I have a strong personal passion to work toward minimizing the inequality and disparities in health care systems of developing countries.
Although this will not be a "hands-on" program, I without a doubt, know I will gain the awareness of other country's health care system will widen my perspective. Past summer, I, by myself, went to Korea and stayed at the House of Angels, a facility for orphans with severe cerebral palsy. While living with them for a month, just by living with them I have learned and felt so much beyond that could be possible in a classroom. But of all, it had I was reminded, in the midst of wavering mind about my career goal, why I had lit a passion in this field in the beginning.
As I'm experiencing the patience and perseverance required to achieve my goal while taking all these weeding science classes I have slowly began questioning myself again: am I smart enough? Isn't there anything else I want to do? But when Wednesdays come every week and I go to volunteer at the Medical Center, I realize why I want to study and why I'm so motivated to pursue career in this direction. And now standing at a point half way through my college life, I believe it is the time for me to go on this adventure and take it to crystallize my vision. Furthermore, the special bonds I'll be able to make with people who share common interest with me will be unforgettable. I believe being able to spend a month with group of people who are as dedicated and passionate about their learning and exploring the different aspects of life would be amazing.
With the basic background of health disparities in the system and some knowledge about health care in developing countries will set me up for active and compelling discussions with fellow students. Culturally, although I'm not Nepali, coming from another Asian country, I believe there are some similarities between two countries. Also, because I have been living in both countries, I'll know to respect their culture and tradition. To the group, I believe I can share my determined passion for my studies with them.
From this trip I hoped to gain a wider view of different perspectives from Nepalese and fellow students. But the experience from exploring to Himalayas would definitely remain with me. Although hard to admit, there is always a fine line between what I want to do and what I can do. And I believe this trip will actually achieve both for me: I hope to actually go to Himalayas, and with a group of people who are as dedicated as I am.
I like your explanation of "aspiration tuning into desperation."
At first the global health aspect about of the seminar had caught my attention, but when I found out about the chance to go to Himalayas my aspiration turned into desperation. to attend this trip.
Streamline it:
I apply the patience and perseverance required to achieve my goal while taking all these weeding science classes, and I have slowly begun questioning myself again: am I smart enough? Isn't there anything else I want to do?
I like how you start and end with some sentences about the trip. It'll be good if you think of the main theme of the whole essay, capture it in a sentence, and place that sentence at the end of that short first paragraph. That will help the reader to identify your central message that you want them to remember.
