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"I want to study environmental engineering" - Johns Hopkins Supplement


Rowa 5 / 15  
Dec 20, 2009   #1
any comments on improvment would be appreciated!! :)
1. Write a brief essay in which you respond to the following question.
Johns Hopkins offers 50 majors across the schools of Arts and Sciences and Engineering. On this supplement, we ask you to identify one or two that you might like to pursue here. Why did you choose the way you did? If you are undecided, why didn't you choose? (If any past courses or academic experiences influenced your decision, you may include them in your essay.)

I stood alone in an abandoned desert, no one to accompany me other than a pair of rough green gloves and a black garbage bag. I looked around me, and all I could see was an interminable pile of garbage on every corner of the horizon. My heart pounded with pain as I thought of the disaster ready to happen amongst me.

"Save the planet", "Go green", and "I love Earth" are all phrases that flow around my head all the time. I want to study environmental engineering. This explains why I am known as the "tree hugger" at school. My passion for the planet is an indescribable passion. Anytime I glance anything related to the environment, it immediately catches my eye. Ironically, I see the words "Johns Hopkins" linked to it. This instantly endorses my decision of choosing Johns Hopkins to study. Being a top research university, I can fulfill my dream of being a widely known environmentalist. My love for both science and the environment has made me choose environmental engineering as a major. With this knowledge I can research areas like bio-fuels and renewable energy sources. Hence, saving our planet and making it a green and clean place to live.

Throughout the years I have learned various things about how to be the change. In recognition to the brilliant change maker, Mahatma Gandhi, who says "Be the change you wish to see in the world", I have envisioned myself as the modern Gandhi. When I was in 11th grade, I attended a conference on how to be the change. I was astonished by the young people who had such influence on others. I wanted to be just like them. This is why I would also like to study Global Environmental Change and Sustainability. If I combine my interest of both the environment and global change, I can see myself as the change maker of this century.
Katsch 4 / 63  
Dec 20, 2009   #2
You stood in a desert?

Ironically, I see the words "Johns Hopkins" linked to it.

Why?

endorses my decision

I don't think endorses is the right word here.

With this knowledge I can research areas

With what knowledge?

Hence, saving our planet and making it a green and clean place to live.
Throughout the years I have learned various things about how to be the change.

Try not to generalize and state the obvious.

Try to be more specific about why Johns Hopkins is the right school for you. What parts of its program attract you?
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Dec 22, 2009   #3
I think you can express a better aspiration than the aspiration to be widely known. Express an aspiration to help us get through what Prof Edward Wilson calls the "bottleneck" in the 21st century -- a time when we will probably destroy life on earth as we know it, but if we manage to make the right decisions for a while we stand a good chance of seeing a reduction in the human population and a chance for the survival of the planet.

Also, why is it ironic that you see the words Johns Hopkins linked to it. I wonder if you really mean ironic, or if you mean... Interestingly instead.

:-)

Kind regards!


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