Hey guys, here's another essay for the common app. I liked this one more than the first one, and I feel like I did it a lot better.
Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better.
Dear Roommate,
The first and probably most important thing to know about me is that even though I may seem like a messy person, everything that I own has its place. Where my stuff is placed is where I need it most, which is how I am able to keep myself efficient. With that being said, PLEASE RESPECT MY STUFF. I don't mind at all if you use my things; what's mine is yours. All that I ask of you is to either put it back how you found it or just ask me. I can't tell you how many times I've had this problem back at home with my sisters. They take my brush, leave it somewhere, and then it's 7 AM and I have to go to school with hair that looks like an animal's nest because I have no idea where the brush is. So please, the one thing that I ask of you is to just respect my things.
Besides that, my name is Tanner and I think of myself as a pretty nice guy. I'm a little shy at first (I'm the guy that stands off to the sides awkwardly at dances), but once I get used to you I promise you that you'll enjoy having me around. I can also promise you that you will never be bored when I'm around, either. I always love to try new things! Because I am prone to frequent cabin fever, don't expect me to just sit in the room and do nothing. I love sports and being active outside, so try and get used to an active lifestyle! Football, basketball, cycling, and fishing are just a few of my favorite things to do. I also love very much to cook for people! But that doesn't mean that those are the only things I enjoy doing. I am also a HUGE fan of video games. My friends and I back home would play for hours on end on the Xbox 360. Maybe even all of us could play together, if you're up for it!
I hope this little note gives you a good idea of who I am. But if you want to know more about me, just spend time with me! I'm sure that we will become great friends from our time spent together!
Your future roomie,
Tanner Jones
like a messy person, everything that I own has its place
BUT, everything that i own
PLEASE RESPECT MY STUFF
Please respect my belongings. Sounds more professional.
I don't want to sound nit-picky, but I would maybe reword the part about respecting your stuff. I think it goes well in it, but you don't want to sound like a bossy person or anything alike. Other than that, good job.
I think you are my future stanford room mate, hah. I hate when people disrespect my things and I am also a very shy person at first. I, too, can get quite into my 360.
