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Subjects in which I have excel or excelled in and factors (Writing and Math)


abdulkac 1 / -  
Dec 3, 2010   #1
Prompt: Discuss the subject in which you had difficulty. What factors do you believe contributed to your difficulties? How have you dealt with them so they will not cause problems for you again? In what areas have you experienced the greatest improvement? What problem areas remain?

Writing has been the most difficult subject to me. When I would be given a writing assignment for a specific topic, I panic. I wouldn't know how to start and whenever I would try to start I would get stuck starting at a paper for an hour and not have anything written down. I have been having writing trouble ever since high school. Until I was five I wasn't exposed to the English language. My parents are immigrant from Ethiopia and only spoke to me in Oromo at home. I believe that not being exposed to the English language like other children born in America, has contributed to my difficulties' in writing.

One of my strategies to overcome this problem has been to take writing classes to help me improve my skills. The class has taught me basic skills on how to get started on a paper and then write. Learning to make a pre-writing diagram has helped me a lot. I have learned that it's best to always pre-write before I actually write; this is a problem that I had. One area that remains a problem for me is grammar. Getting the punctuation right or knowing where it goes is still hard for me. In the past I have veiled on teachers and other adults to help me proofread my work, but now I'm working to change that by working with my classmates and editing on my own

Prompt: Discuss your involvement in and contribution to a community near your home, school or elsewhere. What did you accomplish? How did this experience influence your goal?

A program that I have been involved in and is still activity involved in is called Common Bond Community. Common Bond Communities is a nonprofit organization that provides affordable housing located at several sites. I volunteer twice a week for two hours. Until I was 10 I also was living at of the common bond sites, where I once was getting tutored and help by volunteers that came to our site and help children like me. As I grew older and was at that age of able to volunteer, I decided to give back to my old community by volunteering. I volunteer at the site,working with the children that live in this site, that I once used to live in. Since there were lots of volunteer group opportunities to chose from I went and joined Homework center which I thought would benefit the children and help me gain a better understanding. One thing that I accomplished is providing the children of that site with help they need, a safe enviroment for them to play and provided them with companionship. This experience has influenced my goals because this will help me personally in the future when I have a family and possibly in other choices I may make in my life.

I have been able to see some of the difficulties faced by working parents and how the larger community can help with this.

Please help I will take any criticism, please feel free to write whatever
Thanks
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Dec 17, 2010   #2
Change this to past tense:
When I would be given a writing assignment for a specific topic, I panicked . I wouldn't know...

If you are talking about more than one person (or more than one thing) use an s:
My parents are immigrant immigrants from Ethiopia and only spoke to me...

A program that I have been involved in and is am still activity involved in is called Common Bond Community.

As I grew older and was at an age of that made me qualified to volunteer, I decided ...

2 n's in this word: enviroment environment

You are writing very well. Keep reading aloud and writing; keep practicing all the time! I like the honesty and clarity of these essays.


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