Successful Advertiser; MIT ; Which department/ program at MIT appeal to you and Why?

Although you may not yet know what you want to major in, which department or program at MIT appeals to you and why? (100 words or fewer)

I believe that to become a successful advertiser, I need to understand the markets - what changes are happening to people's lives and perspectives, what are the trends of government policies and why they are happening. Economics gives me a tool to better do so. I hope to gain insight on the application of economic theories through the Project Lab and Undergraduate Research Opportunities Program (UROP). I am thrilled to discover the diversity of research projects I can work on with leading specialists under UROP. Such invaluable experiences will help me appreciate economics better and serve me well as I venture in the advertising world.

a lot of thanks

and hope everybody good luck

this can be rephrased. how about 'changes in people's live and perspectives, trends in government policies and the reason behind them'. and the last couple of lines seem a little wasteful. the same can be said with a lot fewer words. best of luck!

thank you!

You need to elaborate in context of the opportunities MIT will provide you.
Though I am not an expert but hope this will help you.

ok, thanks!

maybe "the changes occurring within the lives and perspectives of citizens, the trends of governmental policies". just to make it a bit clearer


"economics would provide me with tools to foster an improved understanding of the advertising world."


"will help me better appreciate economics as I venture into the advertising world."

Sounds great overall though, I enjoy your writing! Good luck!

thanks!

here is the updated version, looking for final check

I believe that to become a successful advertiser, I need to understand the markets - changes in people's lives and perspectives, trends in government policies and the reasons behind them. Economics would provide me with tools to foster an improved understanding of the advertising world. I hope to gain insight on the application of economic theories through the Project Lab and UROP. I am especially thrilled to discover the variety of research projects I can work on with leading specialists under UROP. I am confident that the diverse experiences students enjoy at MIT will serve me well as I venture into the advertising world.

thanks. as always, i will reciprocate your help

I like the new version a lot better than the first economics would provide' is a bit awkard of a phraseor that sentence

thanks!

Your essay is very good so far and it really shows yourself off:) Keep up the good work

the edited version is MUCH better. You kept it short, simple and never put too many facts in it. I liked your essay. Good luck with school!

Help with mine please? :)