"Successful men" - Unique characteristics that allow me to contributr to UCF.

"Success seems to be connected with action. Successful men keep moving. They make mistakes, but they don't quit." - Conrad Hilton. The fear of failure does not scarce me one bit. It fact, failure shrieks like a little kitten every time it sees me. This allows me to preserver through anything that comes my way. From when I was a young pup, to a sophisticated young adult, my parents taught me that success comes through being able to overcome obstacles. Even though these words seemed like they were from mars, joining little league basketball opened my wondering mind to what it means to overcome trails and tribulation. Now, you may be wondering how someone who isn't afraid of failing can contribute to our fine institution. Well, through my extraordinary ability to persevere, I'll improve test scores, school rankings, and the atmosphere of your already great school.

Nice essay but you have a lot of spelling errors. If it is an essay then i think you should make it longer unless its a personal statement, then its fine.

"not scare me one bit"

"to persevere"

I haven't quite figured out the red font thing yet sorry. =]

That introduction is wicked cool. I am your biggest fan.

Here, you need to fix a typo: This allows me to preservere

I think you can say something more specific than ability to persevere." I think you can add a bit of detail to the focus of this essay so that the theme is "perseverance that comes from fearlessness." That will make your theme more interesting and memorable.

This sentence should mention something about fearlessness: I'll improve test scores, school rankings, and the atmosphere of your already great school.

Great job! Everyone will like you.