Hi,please help with my essay. I know I'm cutting it close and I still have some more supplementary essays. I cant believe I made this draft in 1 hour xP. I think I will edit it once then send it, so I need someone to correct grammar and help with any minor editing or additions. Thanks a bunch! xPCarnegie Mellon Supplementary Essay
Ever since I was little, I have always been fascinated by the wonders of the human body and the nature of the pretty changing colors when two reactive solutions are added together. Not only did I have the passion for science, but I excelled in it as well.
Thus I decided to pursue a career in medicine and biochemistry as I believe that the Mellon College of Science would provide me with the knowledge and skills needed in the biomedical field. I have learned that Carnegie Mellon's research provides opportunities to students who are gifted and nurtures them well. Because Carnegie Mellon provides its students with such advantages is what determines CMU's as my number one choice.
Through my research I have found CMU is the most suitable learning environment which offers the increment of knowledge under the supervision of distinguished professors while providing the advanced technology to improve one's ability to learn through experience. I believe these opportunities will not only assist me to develop my potentials but also help me in gaining a concrete familiarity in my prospective field.
Considering all these factors, I think that CMU will not merely play a major part in shaping my success but will make my goals succeed by equipping me well to achieve my dream to be a doctor. I know this opportunity can help display the range of talents I have while demonstrating my intense love for science, which is why I am especially interested in attending the Mellon College of Science among the many renowned schools CMU offers.