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BU Supp: For the joint program in International Relations & International Communication

chestnuto 2 / 9 3  
Dec 27, 2014   #1
The application deadline is approaching, I would really love some help with this essay!
I think I've covered all the main points, but it's currently 335 words and the limit is only 250. So can you give suggestions on how to trim the length? Grammar check and any other suggestions will be vert much appreciated too. I will to return the favor!

Thanks every one and good luck with your applications too!:)

Prompt: In no more than 250 words, please tell us why BU is a good fit for you and what specifically has led you to apply for admission.

Ever since I was born, I began piecing together my map puzzle. Holding the piece of Mongolia in one hand and China with Muslim on back in the other, I then collected portions of Europe in my exchange year in the UK. Next I grasped Korea while studying there, along with other pieces as I travel to different places. Wherever I go, I'm intrigued by the varied ways people interact and communicate with each other. An initial avid interest led to my internship at a top market research and media consulting firm, sparked my passion towards communication in a global setting.

Summer of my sophomore year, I took International relations and Mass Communications courses at BU. First-hand college life experience on campus enabled me to truly explore BU, and develop an affinity that is continuously reinforced as my research went further.

The Joint Degree program in International Relations & International Communication perfectly caters to my two both of my two passions that are often interrelated. For an aspiring communication major, BU's surroundings are impeccable. It is so integrated with Boston this huge media market, with countless opportunities only a subway ride away. "Summer London Internship Program" provides pragmatic experiences with credits, which is an ideal scene for pursuing an international career. In an increasingly globalized world, opting a joint degree of the two will equip me with a more versatile skill set and broader vision in achieving my dream in the vibrant media industry and more.

Besides academic interests and career goals, BU's values of inclusiveness and social engagement also align with my own. I love the fact that BU emphasizes on rigors study and application, yet still maintains a dynamic campus life. It accurately embodies everything I longed for in university: the energy, the diversity, the ambition and the intellectual brilliance. For all of these reasons, I believe BU is just right for me. I can't wait to travel across the Pacific to BU again and flash it out on my map next fall.
astew5 3 / 3 2  
Dec 27, 2014   #2
Love the map metaphor! Try to tie it at the end a little more. Mentioning it again in the last three or four words makes it feel forgotten and thrown aside. Maybe start your last sentence with a reference to the metaphor. Good luck!
OP chestnuto 2 / 9 3  
Dec 27, 2014   #3
Thank you, both of you for your comments! I'd glad that you like it :)
I'll work on the metaphor in the last sentence, but I'm struggling with the word limits tho.
It says no more than 250 words but I have 335, and I really don't know which part should I cut cuz they all seem quite essential to me. I could really need some help to cut down the words. :)))

Thank you so much!!

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