Sweden/Holland, The South, Nowhere ;300 wrds, "Where are you from?" Kenyon

Where are you from? (Please answer this in any way you'd like-geographically, culturally, artistically, politically, etc.) Focus on brevity and clarity of content; 300 words I am at 251 words

Do you think I'm answering the prompt in a descent manner? Is it too far off?

I can count all of my closest relatives on both hands. There is no signature cultural piece lying around our house. When someone looks at me, they cannot easily say, "Oh, certainly you're from 'this country.'" In fact, making my grandmother's Swedish meatballs is about as close as my family gets to our mixed heritage.

However, it is my obscure cultural background that makes me curious. The ambiguity of "where I am from" has led me to try to deeply investigate my history. I never fail to ask my grandmother all about her Swedish background. I'll pester my father about family crests that I'll find lying around and our Dutch roots. My persistent curiosity has even led me to Ancestry.com to answer the plaguing question of "where am I from?" I have since collected century's worth of cultural history that has given me a plethora of answers to this question. I come from Sweden and Holland, France and England, Memphis and "The South." I have come to realize that I may never be able to define exactly where I am from. I will never have "cultural looks." I will never have an ethnic heirloom. I will never have an extensive family that reaches across the globe. However, in trying to discover where I'm from, I _________

Learning about my heritage has _________. So while it may be hard for me to say exactly where I am from, I hope to say for the next four years that my home is Gambier, Ohio.

(I know that I want/need something in these blanks, I'm just not sure of what to put quite yet. I want to try to stick to the prompt of "where are you from," so I need to try not to stray from that too much)

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I think the main part of your essay lies on what ur avoiding to write yet. because you talk all about how you dont know where you come from but what do you know then? also i like the ending a lot, its clever.

the writing is excellent, i would say. keeps the reader hooked. just think of something you want to fill those blanks with soon and i can help you more.

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Do you think it's bad that I talk too much about how I don't know exactly where I'm from? I mean, obviously I do know where I originate, but the prompt says you can interpret "where you're from" in whatever way. I was aiming to make the point of saying "I don't have a blatant culture. I tried to find my culture because of this. I found my culture, but I realized I am from so many places. While I can technically name locations, where I am from is dependent on other things. (After this fact I get a little lost in what I am trying to say. I know I can take my essay on a couple of different routes, but I'm not sure what would be best for Kenyon's app. Some guidance for the end would be beyond helpful) "


in trying to discover where exactly I am from, I have realized that I come from many different cultures. I never grew up with these cultures guiding my life, but (the essence) of discovering them has guided my current outlook more than I ever imagined possible. In searching for one location to name as my "homeland," I have found that it takes so much more than that to define where we are from. I don't want to let my location define me. I could say I am from Sweden, but I am not blond-haired and blue-eyed. I could say I am from "the South," but I lack a heavy accent (maybe other reasons). I feel that none of the locations I have discovered entirely define me. Rather, it is the culmination of these different locations into one person that makes me, me. I come from my beliefs. I come from my thoughts. (etc. I could go on here, but I'm not sure it's the right direction, what do y'all think?)

I'm really just seeking advice, I can solve the grammar later. I mainly need to coherently write it all down first

Alright well if you want more help just post your new revised version and we can take it from there. Goodluck!

Help with mine if you get the chance.
Mine= 500 word essay Colorado @ Boulder

what i think will help you essay is focussing on where you are from. while you spend a lot of words trying to tell ur not from a certain location, cultural persuasion or political preference, you spend very little words on explaining how you come from you beliefs. elaborate on that.

well, it seems to me that there 's no problem with your essay's content . i'm not sure that i'm true but the following is my opinion :

-firstly :i think , instead of saying (When someone looks at me, they cannot easily say, "Oh, certainly you're from 'this country")why dont you say (when someone looks at me , they can easily say ," you 're not from this country ,arent you ?) because i've never heard anyone say that :p

-secondly , i think ,the sentence "However, it is the ambiguity of where I am from that has led me to deeply investigate my history " must be "However, it is the ambiguity of where I am from that has led me to deeply investigating my history "next "I never fail to ask my grandmother all about her Swedish mother and father " why dont you replace Swedish mother and father by Swedish parent .it help you avoid repeating .

that 's all ,i hope it can help you ^^

hey Lan, it's repeating girl ^^