You definitely have a nag for writing, but when
Ha ha, it is knock, not nag. Nag is what my mother does.
The first sentence was a run on sentence:
To me, swimming is so much more than a sport. It is my way of life.
I live for the pool with all its chlorinated glory,------ woo hooo!! Kevin stands up and cheers...
... while I surpass my goals. --- I think you accomplish goals and surpass obstacles. If you surpass a goal.. that seems wrong.
Without them, I could not be where I am----- which is where, exactly?
Wow, I really love chlorinated glory, hahahaha... nice...