Check out this essay. Please comment on content and grammar generally, but there's two things that I would like specific help in addition to other issues you may find.
1) Is the conclusion okay or do I need something more? I left it at that, because I'm already over the limit.
2) I'm at about 1975 characters and the limit is 1800, so while you critique, can you point out possible ways to cut out 175 characters?
Thanks a bunch!
---------------------------------------------------------------------- ------------Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. What would you want your future roommate to know about you? Tell us something about you that will help your future roommate -- and us -- know you better.
As a tall, lanky Indian boy, I am very easy to stereotype, but my peers always quickly discover that I have my peculiarities, highlighted by what I love to do.
In my opinion, thinking is much underrated. Sitting and thinking is not idle time, but rather time well spent. This is not limited to science or even academics. You may often find me staring out a window, lost in my own thoughts, pondering anything from music to game theory. I treasure the simple encounters that lead to steamy discussions or new ideas. I read voraciously, but good reading, I believe, should be an active mental process. I can never turn down a challenge, especially one that exercises my mind. Combined with my uncanny patience and ability to concentrate, I often lose myself working on puzzles. In fact, I once sat in a corner with a Rubik's Cube for six hours continuously before I finally solved it.
Unusual to the studious Indian stereotype, I love sports. There is hardly a sport out there that I don't like, though team sports top the list. The human interaction and complex strategy involved in playing as a team add a new dimension to team sports. Granted I'm not the most athletic person, but I find competition exhilarating, whether that means playing sports, watching sports, or debating sports. Despite my competitive nature, I value much more than winning. I am very passionate and loyal to the teams and players of whom I am a fan, just as I am with my friends.
Overall, I am a very happy person. Even though I have faced hardship and failure, recently I've learned to look at the bright side of the world. It takes an immeasurable amount of stress to perturb me. No wonder I thrive in high-pressure situations. One of my eccentricities is that I randomly point patterns and designs in nature. Maybe it's because I truly find palindromes pleasing. Maybe it's due to my synesthesia. Whatever it is, I have really learned to find beauty in the world around me.