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1. Would you tell us about a few of your favorite books - University of Chicago


ericpark 2 / 9  
Dec 30, 2009   #1
1. Would you please tell us about a few of your favorite books, poems, authors, films, plays, pieces of music, musicians, performers, paintings, artists, magazines, or newspapers? Feel free to touch on one, some, or all of the categories listed, or add a category of your own.

I am not sure if mine is too risky. I know that it is sexual, but I went for it anyway. Please just send any suggestions.

A guilty pleasure, you know you want to. Come titillate your vision and arouse your mind. These voluptuous vixens and sly seductresses tease one's faculty to a lulled information coma. Feed your carnal hunger. Whether the captivating curves of a Venn diagram or the bewitching bounce of a scatter chart, chartporn.org has everything to kindle your intellectual flame. Chartporn.org offers a sensual sketch on China's one child policy to a flirty recap on the evolution of the hipster. So come in and get off...with information overload.
jamie2010 2 / 12  
Dec 30, 2009   #2
You are definitely not subtle. Lol! I'd say it might be a little too risky. Try something else... less sexual? Or maybe you can stick to that by being a little less expressive? Take what I say only as suggestions.

Can you take a look at my Yale supplement essay? Thanks :)

-Jamie
ab12 - / 8  
Dec 30, 2009   #3
I think it's a little too sexual. i know you were trying to be risky and creative since uchicago likes that but i think this is a little too much. explain why its your favorite. i dont think that comes across very clearly

please read my nyu supplements :)
OP ericpark 2 / 9  
Dec 31, 2009   #4
Would you please tell us about a few of your favorite - U of Chicago Optional

Would you please tell us about a few of your favorite books, poems, authors, films, plays, pieces of music, musicians, performers, paintings, artists, magazines, or newspapers? Feel free to touch on one, some, or all of the categories listed, or add a category of your own.(Favorite Experience)

Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated

"Should I interrupt them and say goodbye? Nah... they're playing and I don't want to bother them."
As I glided to the door, Jordan's hug enveloped me with a sense of warmth and sincerity. Jordan was a non-verbal seven year old, yet had the greatest ability to display affection than that of anyone I knew.

An annual conference called "I Love Families" hosted by a non-profit organization, Knowledge, Support, and Action, offered me the privilege in meeting Jordan. Leaving Jordan in my care, his parents were off to learn more about their son's condition, an extra chromosome. Balls, dinosaurs, and even "Etch-A-Sketches" were strung across the table as my inner child sprang out due to this rare opportunity of childhood ease. The two day conference flew by as Jordan and I decided that play was the only acceptable use of time. Although always smiling and brimming with happiness, my time with Jordan stirred my curiosity on the nature of happiness.

Questions arose whether this happiness was artificial due to the lack of knowledge or understanding of his condition. And even if this happiness was artificial who was I to question it? Jordan had certainly seemed happy while we were playing, jumping, and laughing, but curiosity constantly arose: Does true happiness include a minimum sense of consciousness/awareness?

Jordan had been born with an extra chromosome leading to mental retardation and birth defects, often leaving him incapable of basic human functions such as speech. Jordan would never be offered the place marks of a so-called "normal life," yet radiated joy like sunshine. As I sit here and contemplate about Jordan, I often remember the memories and the questions that he has left me with.
oreo - / 4  
Dec 31, 2009   #5
I like it. This is unique and they add com will remember it. It not only talks about Jordan but also about you. It was a great choice to pick fave experience.
poisonivy 14 / 102  
Dec 31, 2009   #6
Captivating essay! It really tells a lot, and even though it talks about Jordan, I can see there you and your humanity.
Jordan would never be offered the place marks of a so-called "normal life," yet radiated joy like sunshine. - yet is shown to indicate contradiction, while there is none in this sentence. You can replace it with an "and" or sth similar.

Although always smiling and brimming with happiness, my time with Jordan stirred my curiosity on the nature of happiness. - the modifier is placed wrongly, it looks like your time with Jordan is smiling and brimming

Overall great essay. Please, help me with mine :)


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