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Tell us why you are interested in attending Mount Holyoke College.


hani22  
Mar 20, 2018   #1

no eureka moment



The more I read, the more I understand the world around me, there is an underlying realization I'm confronted with. There is so much in this world which I don't understand. I don't understand the social relationships which underpin the gender roles, I don't understand the inequality which is increasingly underpinning the reality of the 21st-century economy, I don't understand why despite scientific consensus there isn't enough being done to tackle climate change, and, above all, I don't understand how to react to increasing global polarisation of the society.

But what I understand is that in order to answer these questions, I need a solid liberal arts undergraduate education. Where I can understand the causes of things, where I can open myself to new ideas, and challenge myself to critically think about the world. This is why I don't intend to choose a major from the point of departure, but aggressively pursue an education in its truest sense. This pushed me to decide to study abroad in the United States, where this form of education has been rightly championed.

Over the past few months, as I browsed through liberal arts colleges across the states, there was something which drew me closer to Mount Holyoke. There is no one thing I can point towards. There was no eureka moment. But small things which pulled me towards applying to Mount Holyoke. Perhaps, it is the small, personal nature of the college, or that it has been an incubator of women leaders who have championed social justice causes, or it could be the idea of studying on the bank of the Lower Pond. What's more likely, is that its a combination of these factors. Underpinned by the desire to understand the world, and that journey, for me, begins from Mount Holyoke.

TMH  
Mar 21, 2018   #2
@hani22
In my opinion you don't need to express you emotional feeling. What you need to write is your educational background or your professional career that should be in line with the major you will undertake. Why you choose Mount Holyoke College, what it is compared to other College in the technology, educational staff, experts, publication etc. How the study you will undertake supporting your career.
Holt [Contributor] 1591  
Mar 21, 2018   #3
Hameeda, the only applicable paragraph in this version of the essay is the last paragraph that you wrote. That is the direct response to the prompt that works effectively to open the essay. Now, depending upon the maximum word count, you should consider expanding the statement by 2 or 3 paragraphs that explain how these small things drew you to the college. The idea behind this prompt is to prove to the reviewer that you are familiar with the university course offerings, community, and educational opportunities. You covered it in general form in the current last paragraph, build upon it so that you can convince the reviewer that though there was no "Eureka!" moment in your decision to seek admission to this college, you had some factors to consider in relation to that decision. Right now, the essay's first part isn't really useful and doesn't help to move the essay forward. Please consider it for the benefit of and the improvement of your statement presentation.


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