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"always tell my mother two words" - Personal statement: my struggle with language


jhjoh31 1 / 1  
Jul 13, 2011   #1
One summer night, I watched The King's Speech. Instead of being an average movie that I see often, the movie became far more just a movie; it became a nostalgic reminiscence of my own condition in the past. In the movie, Colin Firth plays a tragic British king with a speech impediment. He is unable to express his words clearly because of his stuttering condition. Each time he spoke, it would always remind me of the times when I tried to speak as well. I would recall myself speaking in front of my third grade class on the life of Martin Luther King Jr. Just as the main character stuttered, I, myself, also had a similar condition. I was indebted with a language problem. Until third grade, I was unable to neither read nor express my ideas or situations. In class, whenever it was my turn to read or speak in front of the class, my teachers would always exempt me. It was strenuous whenever I heard the word "talk." Due to these reasons, I ardently tried to avoid speaking and connecting with other people. Just as King George's older brother does to him in one scene, some of my classmates decided to use my condition against me. For instance, during recess time was the most fearful period of the day. I was unable to explain to the recess supervisors about my abused condition against bullies; therefore, I was the easiest to take advantage of. I had depression and felt like no one could assist me. However, my mother thought otherwise. Like Geoffrey Rush's character Lionel Logue, who was an unofficial speech therapist from Australia, my mother tried to ameliorate me by making me feel comfortable. She was the only person who could understand what I was going through. In order to assist me further, my mother decided to become a teacher's helper to assist me for four years starting from second grade. She sent me on countless exercise sessions to strengthen language skills, and she had me endure through confidence building techniques. After school, my mother and I reviewed all class lessons over and over again. Due to my mother's endless support, my condition eventually disappeared. I could read and speak just like any regular student. Starting from fourth grade, I begun reading several chapter books and gained an interest in reading. As my academic skills improved, my social interactions became profound as well. I made many friends, my grades improved significantly, I joined many extracurricular activities, and I became prom king as well. My mother personified as a companion and a true friend. Her perseverance and altruism, the exact same characteristics Logue exhibited to the British King, taught me that no matter how difficult a specific task is, there will always be someone who will assist you. As the British King tells Logue in the final scene of the movie, I will always tell my mother two words: "Thank You."
kevman 1 / 10  
Jul 14, 2011   #2
First sentence I read I started to doze off. Try something like "Watching the King's Speech I smirked with nostalgia. "He sounds like the British version of you!", Mother smirked."

just an idea for the very start :)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jul 16, 2011   #3
Hey, is this all one paragraph? Separate it into paragraphs, and begin each paragraph with a PARAGRAPH TOPIC SENTENCE.

"Watching the King's Speech I smirked with nostalgia.

Yes, the trick is to use some magic words. Some words just get the attention of the reader. They surprise the reader a little.

After you write a draft, go back and cut as many words as possible, like Miyagi trimming a Bonsai:
n the movie, Colin Firth plays a tragic British king with...

:-)

My mother personified as a companion and...---Hey, this is not the right way to use the word personified. You write very well, though, so I think you can figure out an alternative.

Welcome to EssayForum, Mark!!
OP jhjoh31 1 / 1  
Aug 10, 2011   #4
Thank you all!!


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