Ten years ago if you asked me where I was headed, I would fumble to come up with what I thought would sound impressive. I honestly didn't know where I was heading or who I was as an individual. I was constantly trying to find my niche in society. Not only was I uncertain of what I wanted to major in, I simply felt like I had no exceptional talents in one specific area. Could I be a future doctor? No too clumsy How about a a lawyer? Not objective enough.
this passage doesn't hit the prompt, which was asking AFTER the graduation. Start with your next sentence, in which you actually begin to talk about your ambition and future!
the rest is great, just shorten your misleading first sentences (i understand that you're trying to start and capture the reader, but don't make it 10 lines, one sentence should be enough) and talk more about your actual psychology, ambition. HOW did drop rates and all these change? do you have any ideas?
the point of this prompt is to figure out whether you are ambitious (which you covered) and if you have ANY type of plan, or is it all fluff (that part you haven't).