I know its a bit long, but i was wondering if someone could proof read it to make sure it made sense and followed the criteria. The question is.
For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life.
I feel that Florida State is a perfect fit for me, throughout this grueling task of discovering which university best defines me, Florida State has risen to the top because of it's excellent academic prestige. Florida State offers the challenges and assets to prepare me for my future endeavors. The values that your university establishes and embodies through its students are "Vires, Artes, Mores", or translated into strength, beauty, and character. These principles also apply to me.
Mores signifies character or tradition. There is no better example of this than when I first began to play sports. In second grade, my parents felt it was time to give football a try, since it was my first year it was flag football. Anyone who has ever played a sport will admit that sports have life lessons to teach and build character even from a young age. Especially, if you are the superstar on your seven year old flag football team. My first experience with a sport, was a good one, I was the child who seemed like everyone was his parent because all the adults were cheering for me. This influenced me and made me modest, being my best was just natural to me, and even today when I do something good in the classroom or in a sporting even I act with respect and modesty.
Artes signifies intellectual beauty, such as skill and arts. I will be the first to admit that I am not very artistic, but I acquired many skills throughout my life. One being public speaking, since I am confident in my beliefs and abilities, I never worry when presenting in front of a large crowd. Last June, I ran for class treasurer, and had to tell over 300 hundred people including facility members, why I was qualified for the position. Due to my laid back and easy manner personality and speaking I inevitably won. Just recently I was appointed as the team captain of my school basketball team, I possess leadership skills and always try to lead by example. This has gained me the respect of my teammates and peers because they know I am not only a great person but also a loyal friend and companion.
Vires signifies all types of strength. If there were any part of my character I would call strong, it would be my mental strength. Being mentally strong allows me to persevere and have morals and commitments. With admirations of becoming a lawyer, having mental strength will serve me well, by being confident and knowing right from wrong I will succeed as a lawyer. Out of the three values, Vires is the most vital, because without growing, as a person is impossible.
In Conclusion, I feel that this motto easily applies to me, through this process of answering your question, I have learned much about these values and how they apply to me. There is no doubt that I believe and stand for, the principles set forth by your university, and would fit well at Florida State. Florida State has much to offer and obviously establish character into its student. I feel that Florida State is perfect and would give me the best opportunities to succeed in my future endeavors.
I think your content is a great answer to the prompt. You take each character trait and evaluate and apply it to your life, with enough detail not to loose your reader. Your paragraphs are well organized, and your thoughts flow fluidly. Your conclusion wraps everything up, and your introduction is a great match with it. Nice work.
