Slowly opening my eyes, I mentally cheer myself upon seeing the beautiful hand- made quilt I had been working on for months.
Slowly opening my eyes, I immerse in the pleasure of admiring the beautiful hand-made quilt that took my time and soul for months.After my mother was diagnosed with breast cancer, I started _______, a non-profit, volunteer-run organization which makes and donates quilts to cancer patients.
Is this the reason you got into quilting or you were doing it before too? That point is not very clear.
I tie my last knot, hoping that this time, each stitch and block will be perfect. Slowly opening my eyes, I mentally cheer myself upon seeing the beautiful hand- made quilt I had been working on for months. After my mother was diagnosed with breast cancer, I started _______, a non-profit, volunteer-run organization which makes and donates quilts to cancer patients. Since day one, quilting has challenged my perseverance:
These 3 sentences do not have a very good connection between each other. They seem to be independent from one another and that disturbs your flow.