Dear Mrs. Lomax,
Hello my name is Vinusan. I was born in the delightful city of Belleville, which is located east of Scarborough. This will be my third year attending Lester. B Pearson Collegiate Institute. I only have two younger sisters. My second youngest sister's name is Lojana and she's interested in becoming a dentist, and loves to read. My youngest sister's name is Sharmina. She loves soccer and basketball but all time favourite hobbies are listening to music. I look forward to learn more about literature and media in your class and with your help I hope I'll be able to get the foundation for grade 12 English.
I just love listening to music, in other words you could call me a rhythmical learner. My favourite types of music are classic, hip-hop, and freestyles. To tell the truth these genres are the ones that help me stay calm or relaxed. The best singer to my opinion is Lil Wayne, Eminem, and Rick Ross. They have the greatest voice and the all time hit albums. To tell the truth I'm addicted to music because I need it to sleep, wake up, and while I'm doing homework. While sleeping I listen to Eminem's soft calm songs like, "mocking bird," and when I need to wake up my alarm is set to Lil Wayne's hardcore songs like, "smoke some weed."
After I graduate school with honours I'm preferably going to enter Queens University. At Queens I'll be studying for B.SC (Bachelor of Science). When I obtain my degree I will head back to the Scarborough area and try to apply for my pharmacy licence it'll probably take 1-1 ˝ years to receive. Then ill open up my own pharmacy near the Scarborough general hospital. The reason behind becoming a pharmacist is when I'm 28 the senior rate will be high due to baby boomers. This statics mean people in the medical field will get a more employment and income rate.
Overall I'm really excited for this semester and English class. I hope we have good time and a good educational experience.
Sincerely,
Vinusan Vigkneswaran
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