"my tiny remote controlled car" - MIT - Department Essay

Although you may not yet know what you want to major in, which department or program at MIT appeals to you and why?

Playing with my tiny remote controlled car five years ago, I thought "How exactly does this work?." So, not to my family's surprise, I broke it upon the day I received it and was intrigued to find a complex network of wires and circuits. Electronics never cease to amaze me. My love for electronics made me learn programming, which in turn helped me be one of my school's Robotics team programmer . This obsession with Electronics took me to such an extent that I decided to become an Electrical Engineer. Thus, the Electrical Engineering and Computer Science department appeals the most to me.

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Anything to make it better?

I have a very general comment to make about this essay. I think it's well written, and I haven't looked for grammar issues yet, but being in the same boat and also applying to MIT, I took the question a different way.

You clearly put the emphasis on which DEPARTMENT at MIT interests you, and I took it as which department at MIT interests you. So personally, I would gear the essay a little more toward the MIT aspect and mention a few specific programs or opportunities you would be taking advantage of.