I'm sort of worried about the delivery of my "Why?" essay. It is formal, boring, and forgettable, but it is also honest. Any critique/suggestions are greatly appreciated.
How does the University of Chicago, as you know it now, satisfy your desire for a particular kind of learning, community, and future? Please address with some specificity your own wishes and how they relate to Chicago.
"So, where do you want to go to college?" A simple question that has become a reoccurring ritual over the past couple of months; despite the numerous questioners, my answer has always been consistent. Selecting a college to attend is an adventure all on its own, but ever since the beginning of my search, I have always been intrigued to attend the University of Chicago. Despite living thousands of miles away in the rainy city of Seattle, I know that Chicago is where I aspire to have my undergraduate experience.
The University of Chicago is deemed to be the perfect liberal arts college. I'm relentless when it comes to a challenge; the rigorous coursework and high grading standards at the University of Chicago will provide the academically demanding experience that I strive for. With the extensive Core Curriculum and wide range of courses offered, I will be able to break out of my comfort zone and participate in classes that I never had the opportunity to take.
The environment at University of Chicago is incomparable to other schools. I take pride in attending the most diverse high school in Seattle. The diversity on campus definitely plays a role in where I decide to continue my education. The University of Chicago aims for a diverse student body and faculty, which is a vital concept because it is essential to interact with people from different backgrounds to learn their perspectives and different points of view.
David Suzuki, alumnae of University of Chicago, is a source of inspiration who empowers me to continue my education in a field that I have always loved - science. With his passion and scientific understanding, he has become a notable environmental protector, raising climate change awareness and creating a non-profit organization that aims to create equilibrium between human need and nature. Suzuki's role in reversing global warming and his contributions to sustain all life are what motivate me to explore the world of science, and I believe the University of Chicago will prepare me to become the intellectual that I aspire to be.
During my years at Chicago, I hope to go beyond just receiving an education. In a facility where education is highly valued, and intellectual thoughts prosper, I will be able to thrive and make my mark in this world, contribute to society, and make a difference.
Very well-crafted. Also very different to mine lol!
As it is, it is very well-written. I am envious of your writing skills.
To make it more interesting, you could find an interesting prompt that triggered your interest, or had finalized your decision. But then again I don't know if mine works... So this might not be good advice. Oh well, depends on how you take it or not. Clearly you have a passion for the school, but how much do you know about it? Maybe some research as to the specific opportunities you hope to make use of at the university would add to your response.
That said, you're a very good writer and I'd also appreciate some advice from you on mine!
"So, where do you want to go to college?" A simple question that has become a reoccurring theme over the past couple of months; despite the numerous questioners, my answer has always been consistent. Selecting a college to attend is an adventure all on its own, but since the beginning of my search, I have always been intrigued by the prospect of attending the University of Chicago.
The environment at University of Chicago is incomparable to other schools. I take pride in having attended the most diverse high school in Seattle.
During my years at Chicago, I hope to go beyond just receiving an education. In a facility where education is highly valued, and intellectual thoughts prosper, I will be able to thrive and make my mark in this world, contribute to society, and make a difference.
Nice!
:)
