jm7685 2 / 3 Oct 10, 2015 #1Hey i am planing on transferring to UW-Madison after Two years in a UW-College.Thanks in advance for any response it's greatly apreciatedStatement one: Consider something in your life you think goes unnoticed and write about why it's important to you.Being extremely overweight or obese my whole life has been a struggle for myself sometimes. I always was looking for a quick fix and expected the fat to just melt off my body. Working out has never been a problem for me, I was involved in high school sports and when I went to college I worked out in the gym and played intramural sports. I always thought that it would be enough and never really focused on my diet, but now I realize that what I put in my body affects me more.After struggling and trying to loose weight throughout high school and my first semester in college I made a discovery about myself, I was addicted to food. So I decided to focus on my diet and take a break on exercising until I got a grip on my addiction and felt comfortable enough to start exercising again. But again, I expected that if I started to eat healthy and cut out my trigger foods that the fat would just go away, faster than I had put it on. That was not the case, over the spring and for most of summer of this year I went back and forth between eating healthy and going back to my unhealthy ways of eating junk food and overeating, just because I felt it didn't matter because I wasn't losing enough weight.Then as the beginning of my sophomore year at UW-Manitowoc was closing in I made a decision that no matter what I was going to get over my addiction and here I am a couple of months later twenty pounds lighter and still going strong. I know the road ahead will be tough and filled with temptations but my goal of being a heathier individual still goes through my mind every day and keeps me fighting. Through this continuing experience I feel that I have finally realized that there no long term quick fixes, something that I never noticed before. It may take more time and effort but if you are committed to the long term it will pay off in the end. That is why my I feel that by taking this idea that there are no long term quick fixes will not only enrich myself but to UW-Madison community as a whole.
justivy03 - / 2,366 607 Oct 10, 2015 #2- ...struggle for myself sometimes( no need to specify the severity of the issue ) .- I was always was looking for a quick- ButThen again,- Then as the beginningat the start of my sophomore...- no matter what, ( your missing your punctuation marks, you have to put a stress on the phrases and break in reading your essay )- I have finally realized that there are no long term quick fixes,- That is why my I feel that by taking this idea, that there- ...but to UW-Madison community as a whole.I made a few minor fixes in your essay, the description of the remarks are detailed above.You have a well written essay and there very minor corrections.You still have a long way to go for a healthier life and this is true to education too, so keep it up!!!