When reflecting on the past four years of highschool and thinking of all the things I have done, it is hard to pinpoint the single most important event or attribute that has shaped me in my high school career.
I don't care. Pick something and start talking about it instead of opening with this.
t seems like I have done so much in four years that I have had a taste of everything on my plate and love all of it but cant finish it all without getting an upset stomach.
Great. So you're a dilettante who lacks the patience and decisiveness necessary to be successful in a single field of intense study? Why would you say this about yourself in an admissions essay?
Although I have done a lot I can say that everything I chose to do or not do was all for the better and I would do it all over again if I had the chance.
And this has to do with the prompt, how, exactly?
I personally believe these two sports showed me my true "vires" even if I wasn't the best in the world at them I learned that the only goals that matter are my own.
Your body paragraphs are much better than your introduction. Still, you should avoid ending on a negative note, as you do in this sentence. Revise your essay with a view to getting rid of anything that could possibly be taken as casting you in a negative light, and your essay will be much stronger.