"tradition of educating leaders" - Why Mt Holyoke College

Well that I have chosen Mount Holyoke because of its tradition of educating leaders, to study under the guidance and teaching of celebrated professors is one yet not all of my intention. Since high school, I have been taking an obligation to transform the school's students union into a democratically structured organization. Many times my attempts had failed and motives denied. While not being disppointed, I am eager to establish a thourough and sophisticated understanding in the history and politics of East Asia. My decision was firmed upon the release of Aung San Suu Kyi in 2010. The undiminishing passion of the precursor of democracy encouraged me to carry on my unfulfilled dream at high school by studying the Asian/Pacific/American Studies certificate at Mount Holyoke College.

The global perspective that Mount Holyoke encourages its graduates to implement into their learning is no doubt an attraction to me. I am particularly interested in attending the Global Challenges Conferences where I can personally experience the most insightful analysis on global challneges and deepen my understanding on policy solutions for issues related to Asia and China. The Asian/Pacific/American Studies program with its unique five college certificate will provide me with a solid background in Asian politics and history. I am most attracted by courses such as 'Immigration, Diasporas, and Transnationalism' and 'South-East Asian Diaspora' within the Global Intersections. The completion of the certificate will serve a most rigorous platform towards my Bachelor of Art's degree in sociology.

I think that this is an amazing essay and you convey your point through really well. I can't find any fault in it, actually. And I bet that this will make for a great read for the admissions officer.

Well that I have chosen Mount Holyoke because of its tradition of educating leaders, but studying under the guidance and teaching of celebrated professors is not my only intention.

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Great detail here. You obviously are serious about your envisioned process!

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