however, I myself made I preference to a mathematic courses of algebra and geometry,
however, I preferred math courses like algebra and geometry
I knew that I need to be very well finance educated and that I want to succeed in business to support my parents.
I knew I had to be well educated in finance in order to succeed in Business and support my parents.
whether in my current university,
whereas, in my current university
I have monitored a lot
What have you monitored??
I would also like to become a part of Alpha Kappa Phi organization cause I have heard and read about it a lot.
This is not good enough a reason to become part of this organization. Mention what is it in the organization that attracts you.
You have started with your high school years without giving any introduction about yourself or your family. Drop in a line or two about this.
Also, write about why the university should choose you over others.. I mean your plus points.
You can also mention about the drawbacks of your current university, apart from the location which you have mentioned.
I don't have much experience writing SOP or related stuff. So others might be able to help you better.
Cheers