If you say "Few" it means "not many"
But if you say "A few" it means "Some."
There is a big difference in meaning.
A few events in my life have changed me and made me a better person, and
my dads quest for a better life
is among the most significant of
It is important to use separage paragraphs for each idea you want to express:
From then onwards everyday my dad would drive two hours and spend ten hours working for a year until that small business was running successfully without problems.
Before all this happened I
had been in senior high school and I
not trying at all. I
did the bare minimum necessary
to get by and was more...
This event not only made me a better person, but
also set me up for a life full of success and education.
In high school I
I would be following in my father's footsteps by
pursuing a ...
When you add an "extra" word to a sentence, separate it with commas:
My Macro professor, Mr.Tontz, increased my appetite...professors
You explained your interests very well in this second essay, but you could go a little further to discuss
experience you have had in the field
Most importantly, use paragraphs!one paragraph = one idea, and the idea is expressed clearly in the first sentence of the paragraph.