Through experiencing the diverse programs and classes offered at my high school, I was able to narrow my academic interests to a single, apparent favorite .
The incorporationblend?? of my two favorite subjects, math and science, fascinatesintrigues me and it creates the challenges that I love inspire me. There is a certain type of excitement, born ofcomes withthe endless possibilities thatcomputers represent, that creates an infatuation.
that creates an infatuation...Hmmm, I think you can do better with this description. Being infatuated with a computer is kinda creepy :)
Your second paragraph needs a lot of work on the organization aspect.
I like the last line you put in, keep it. Work some changes and post a second draft. I will be happy to proof it again.
Blue skies!
Jeannie