Saying is one thing and doing another.
Very true ^^. I want to comment on this quote though. I think it should be catchier, since you are using an aphorism to kick off your essay. Imagine you are Benjamin Franklin and how he would say this. In other words, try to be wittier :]
I left for Australia to travel and to learn English when I was 10 years old with my agents.
This sentence is suffering a misplaced modifier. This happens when you take a prepositional phrase and put it the wrong place, making the sentence have a slightly different (or sometimes, hilariously different ;) meaning. I think what you are saying is:
"I left with my agents for Australia to travel and to learn English when I was 10 years old."
I was really happy to get out ofescape my parents' eyes and I played Halo, which was the bestmost popularX-Box game at that time, every day.
Some corrections. I also noted that you have a habit of starting a lot of your sentences with "I." Not to be offensive, but many find that boring. You should vary your sentences, using simple, compound, and complex ones throughout your essay. This will liven your essay up.
When I heard my mother's voice say, " Son, are you fine? How about food?,"
This is the first time I ever felt really family love because the love is hard to recognize important people when they are around, but it is easily recognized when they are not around.
Here, I'm not sure what you are talking about here. This sentence is very convoluted. Try to divide this sentence into two and to make them clearer.
Some parts feel very cliche-y.
I think so too. But don't fear. Even if this kind of story sounds familiar, the best way to personalize it is to elaborate on it, as Quynh said. Elaborate on how you made them unhappy at times and why you felt love at that point in time. Remember, only you know all your experiences and the reader doesn't, so you will have to fill us in on that.