I'm talking about a woman who has showed me that with hard work and determination, any obstacles or hardships we face can be overcome.
I'm talking about a woman who proved that hard work and determination can win any obstacle or hardship in life. -------------------- though you dont specifically say that she showed you this, it is implied.
She's shaped me into the person that I am today and has made me proud of who I am. I'm talking about my mother.
This person is no other, but my beloved mom who shaped my character into be the one I'm today.My mom struggled as a teen parent, she and my dad dropped out of high school in order to work, and be able to provide a home for us.
This sentence is not very clear... the dad's part is not clear and who provided you with a home?
We moved around a lot when I was younger young and when my brother was born two years later, they struggled even more. However, these obstacles didn't deter my mom from being a great parent. Her ambition and drive to provide for her family kept my brother and me from ever feeling like we were less fortunate than other kids.
We never wanted for anything and the fact that we had teen parents didn't matter.
... this is not clear too....better rephrase!