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True Love, Princeton Supplement


maXimumeXposure 3 / 8  
Jan 8, 2010   #1
Princeton Supplement

What are your thoughts on true love? Why do you want to apply to Princeton?


I was fifteen and my heart was araced. I saw her walk past me, past me like a hurricane, a soft breeze, as past as a dinosaur. My heart roared, I wanted more. Her tinkly smell wesn't enough. My training as a poet has led me to appreciate the finer things in life, so I barely noticed her liquid eyes or her tangent smile. What caught my eye, like a pair of shades,was the shadow left by her collar bone, her tiny freckles, the hint of a bra strap, taking a peek into the glorious world around. And round my head went- I was speechless, my jaw hung wide open, hung like Saddam, hung like a horse's manhood. Or horsehood. I knew it right then, she was my one true love . She was like the internet to me- everywhere, all knowing, all powerful and full of nasty/lovely things. Princeton is the perfect place for me, with its engaging faculty and star studded resource, it is he perfect opportunity for me to grow as an indivisual.
syookhong 7 / 21  
Jan 8, 2010   #2
"as past as a dinosaur"
i didnt quite get what you mean :(
OP maXimumeXposure 3 / 8  
Jan 8, 2010   #3
cuz dinos are from the past and i said she walked past me. i thought it made sense :(
my school counsellor told me metaphors and similies are the best way to enrich a written piece, so i gave it a shot.
Toodles!
syookhong 7 / 21  
Jan 8, 2010   #4
"I saw her walk past me, past me like a hurricane, a soft breeze"

this one made sense
AMehj 3 / 10  
Jan 8, 2010   #5
this is sexy like a dhanmondi tongue.
iz it fact or fiction?
and good luck for princeton!
glimmering 1 / 14  
Jan 8, 2010   #6
"I knew it right then, she was my one true love. She was like the internet to me- everywhere, all knowing, all powerful and full of nasty/lovely things. Princeton is the perfect place for me, with its engaging faculty and star studded resource, it is he perfect opportunity for me to grow as an indivisual."

I think these two senteces are not coherently related.
How about metamorphozing Princeton as the girl you loved?


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