Grammatical errors aside, I believe that this is the prompt response you should use. It responds in an expanded way to the essay instructions and thus, offers an insight into the kind of point of view about life and culture that you have. That said, I would like you to note the corrections that you need to make within the essay below:
The first time when I read Tuesdays with Morrie was on a night before my junior's finals. At that time, I was tired of the endless and meaningless school life. I used to be passionate with study in junior middle school when curriculums were interesting, schoolwork reasonable, and schedule flexible. However, everything changed in high school. Because of the heavy schoolwork, I gradually became a study machine. I knew nothing but input, textbooks and exams, and output, scores and grades.
- ... i had lost my passion for study because of the demanding study schedule and inflexible study hours. I was become unhappy and saw myself as an automaton, programmed to simply study and take tests.That night, I aimlessly looked through the books on the shelves of the library. Out of nowhere, Mitch's book attracted me. In the book, Mitch Albom tells the story of a real experience between his old professor, Morrie and him. Amazingly, when I read the book,it's like a life-long conversation with Morrie. He shows me how to deal with love, fear, family, emotions, money, culture, the aging and the death. Amongst them , Morris's opinion on culture impresses me most. He tells me not to believe the misleading illusions in our culture but try to create my own subculture .
- ...the book
I felt like I was having a life-long...
on culture impressed me the most as he enlightened me about now being misled by the illusions of our culture and traditions.I was shocked when I realized what he told me is. Everybody, including me, truly has long been affected by our surrounding culture for what we value and how we think: like people without jobs might believe that society has discarded them, while the rest worry about losing theirs.
I realized that it's the education culture that brainwashed me and took all my happiness away. Though can't run outof it, following Morrie's instruction, I started to create my own culture to fight against it. Gradually, I finda balance between study and entertainment, begin read books I liked instead of assigned, and joined club I interested in. It's Morrie who helped me to renew my sense of culture and find my life back .
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away from it. .. Gradually,
I found a balance between my studies and entertainment, began reading books I liked instead of those assigned to me, and I joined a club I was interested in. Morrie helped me renew my sense of culture and get my life back.I revised your paragraphs to make the essay tighter and more interesting to read. I also did that to correct the grammar problems in relation to tenses.