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If TUFTS was a book - Why Tufts essay


yloot 5 / 23  
Oct 25, 2010   #1
Wheater this essay is good or worthless, which one?

If Tufts was a book, The New York Times would say "Galvanizing People and changing lives- academic yet equally alive", The Guardian will praise it by saying "***** a masterpiece, a worldly source for people from every nation to find something common and unite", and back cover synopsis would summarize my chapter in it as:"A young girl's adventures to find her undecided identity. Enjoying the unparalleled minor in MCMS with its interdisciplinary course selection,spending hours in the cubicles of Tisch Library,refining her creative expression with TuftsDaily and TUTV, rediscovering languages and filling the sadly empty blog of Tuftsfilmworks the only question remains is Will her hectic bliss go on forever?"

and I can say if tufts was a book, it would be a one that worth reading.
simplyhelen 1 / 2  
Oct 25, 2010   #2
I feel like the idea of comparing Tufts to a book is great, but the essay needs some changes. Most universities want to read about your specific interests in their school or what makes them stand out above other universities. I see that your essay displays Tufts as a really amazing school, but you didn't have any allusions to why you want to attend there. Just try to incorporate your specific interests in the school with the essay and it'll turn out great :)
OP yloot 5 / 23  
Oct 26, 2010   #3
what is the thing missing in this essay to make it a great essay?
Ngozi93 3 / 30  
Oct 26, 2010   #4
the idea of it is great but try to incorporate in some way your interests in the school rather than comparing tufts to a magazine, describe in a way what you find most appealing about tufts and how your a good fit and explain some parts of you within it.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Oct 31, 2010   #5
You need a comma:
If Tufts was a book, The New York Times would say, "Galvanizing ...

And change this comma into a period inside the " mark: ...People and changing lives -- academic yet equally alive." The Guardian will would praise it by ...

Capitalize that last mention of Tufts. Also, it would be good to throw in a comment about this girl's intentions for her professional field as she attends the school

:-)


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