For the second short response, we asked you to consider the world around you. Now, consider the world within. Taste in music, food, and clothing can make a statement while politics, sports, religion, and ethnicity are often defining attributes. Are you a vegetarian? A poet? Do you prefer YouTube or test tubes, Mac or PC? Are you the drummer in an all-girl rock band? Do you tinker? Use the richness of your identity to frame your personal outlook. (200-250 words)
My definition comes from the things I use. It comes from my text books, the walls of my room and the bed sheets I use whose surfaces are always adorned with different types of Manga art and animations. If I could find anything at all to work with -weather it's a pencil, pen , charcoal or even dropped ink on floor- my hands starts to play with the medium to create art and characters of my imagination. My definition comes from the clothes I wear. The high pitched pony tail, neat and clean appearance and flat shoes that hover in a sense of decency and yet again the image of a girl whose always in a jolly-good mood. My definition comes from the back of my notebooks where endless stories had begun and left uncompleted. Where countless emotions of love, fear, horror and affection are gathered around the words to create beautiful stories and fictional anecdotes of past times or of things yet to come. It comes from the fact that weather am sleeping, eating, drinking or working my mind never rests. Every day I have a new motivation and a new idea to ponder upon. I never stop imagining and I never stop drawing! I guess that is the true definition of my personality.
Just for reference!
It's great! Shows your unconstrainted imagination! Maybe it's a little bit incoherent. My suggestion is to form a logic sketch in the description.
And then there are several spelling mistakes~
Good luck to us!
I like what you wrote! I liked how it's very descriptive. Sounds like you're living the good life right about now.
Make sure to remove spaces before commas.
In Chicago style, you need "serial commas" before the last item in a list of three or more (textbooks, walls, and sheets), but it's fine without them.
It's a nice essay.
woah!:0 thank you for the edit..now I realize I made so many mistakes and I have already submitted my tufts essay :'( but thank you anyway
on floor- my hands starts
"ON THE FLOOR" and "start".
I think this is also brilliant! I love the way how you narrate it, creative and impressing. You're a really good writer!
thank you so much ^_^
Very nice descriptions!!! Fix the errors pointed out above and you're good to go :D Could you look at my JHU Additional interests essay?
