ASSIGNMENT: [from Tufts website] Which aspects of Tufts' curriculum or undergraduate experience prompt your application? In short: "Why Tufts?" (50-100 words)
I'm casually reading on my bed when my phone lights up with a notification. "Tuftsadmissions retweeted your tweet..."
I'm beaming- I can't believe this!
The wide smile on my face in that moment is one of the most genuine feelings of happiness. 100 words cannot possibly cover the excitement Tufts instills in me. Students here dance, and simultaneously study chemistry. They sneak out at night and continue painting the cannon. And they proudly tell everyone that asks-They are Jumbos.
"Follow your instincts" is something I've always heard. I'm following mine this time, hoping that they lead me to spend the next 4 years of my life at Tufts.
I actually really like this; I understand how difficult 100 words or less can be, and you have displayed a genuine excitement about Tuft's that is remarkable for the word limit. I would get rid of the numbers and actually write them out, but other than that I love it!
ASSIGNMENT: [from Tufts website] Which aspects of Tufts' curriculum or undergraduate experience prompt your application? In short: "Why Tufts?" (50-100 words)
It's not my intention to be "mean," but the answer is no---just no.
You're being too cute. Answer the question.
Tufts takes its students, both literally and figuratively!; *WHY TUFTS?*
Prompt: Which aspects of Tufts' curriculum or undergraduate experience prompt your application? In short: "Why Tufts?" (50-100 words)
Ever since I received a Jumbo magazine in the mail, I've been awed by the places Tufts takes its students, both literally and figuratively. How often do you hear of a college a cappella group starring in one of the biggest shows on TV? (Yes, I'm a Gleek!) The fact that I will have a shot at taking my education beyond limits inexplicably excites me. What makes me smile even more, though, is the playful environment Tufts embodies. How can I deny the chance of spending 4 years of my life at a place that feels like home and a wonderland at the same time?
Hello,
Somehow you have managed to write a lot of fluff and absolutely nothing of substance about "Why Tufts." Also, I hate to burst your bubble, but many many college A Capella groups have cameos on various TV shows, it is not as uncommon as you think. As I have stated before, while college view-books are great at providing general and highlighted information about a program, they should be used as only a small part of the college selection process. Show Tufts that you have really researched the school by talking about aspects of the undergraduate culture there that really appeal to you and that make Tufts unique.
Hope this helps
Also, if you have chosen your degree, why not talk about the degree and specific undergraduate programs? The prompt asks what part of the school's curriculum made you choose Tuft's. So talking about the degree/program your interested in will give them a specific idea of how you will benefit their school as well as their program.
Thanks for your feedback! I understand your point of using specific facts about a degree, but I just want to mention a couple things. First,I have not yet selected what I want to pursue for sure, so I can't really talk about that. And second, while I agree that showing a college that you have done your research on programs that they offer is helpful, I have seen a BUNDLE of admitted students' "Why tufts" essays that just talk about the feel of tufts and its environment.
For example: I have this special skill. Sort of like a party trick, except no one is ever overly impressed. I can identify random fonts. (In case you were wondering, the body text of the Tufts website is mainly in Bookman.) While I flipped through the Jumbo magazine I picked up on tour, I mumbled half to myself, "Loving the Rockwell" and for the first and last time in my life, the person next to me replied, "I know, right?" It's not anywhere were you can 'celebrate your nerdy side,' and Tufts is the only place I have found thus far.
I'm not totally depending on what past admits have written, but except for the last couple lines, this essay doesn't seem to incorporate any 'facts' about Tufts either...He/She is just talking about what appeals to them about Tufts, as I did. (I am definitely willing to alter my essay, not arguing against that, but still i just wanted to point this out)
Hello,
Even the essay that you submitted from your "admitted" friend is not a good one. In fact it is pretty lack-luster. However, even "Tufts" needs to fill seats. I am pretty sure that the rest of his/her application made up for this. At the end of the day, this forum is about helping students present the strongest essays/applications they can. The two essays that you have presented here are in no way the strongest they can be. Think of it this way. Submitting a very strong application could make the difference between acceptance with a full scholarship and just a general acceptance. Always try to make every aspect of your application as strong as it can be.
Hope this helps
Creativity works well for performing arts students as well as enthusiasm. Maybe not end the answer with a question since it's leaving it open ended. Define one things about TUFTS and answer around that. It's on the right track.
I've have family that are performing arts majors so I have an idea what it took to get accept to these programs.
