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Given your interests, values, and goals, explain why Oberlin College will help you grow (as a student and a person) during your undergraduate years.
Oberlin is the hub of civic activism where I could engage in numerous public service activities; it is also the cradle of human knowledge where I could learn, think, and study.
Independently, I have been tutoring other people since eleventh grade. I am also an active writer on internet criticizing brutal treatment to animals. Knowing that there are many miseries and injutices in the world that need to be fixed, I aspire to better the world as much as I can. At Oberlin, beside joining the tutoring program and Animal Rights Club, I would also explore the wide range of social service and club oppornuties offered here. Though not a gay myself, I plan to join the LGBT society, which is the largest and most vocal subgroup in the campus. I feel its my mission and responsibility to help advance human civilization by broadening people's mind in issue like gay and lesbeian rights.
As a person who always stretches his potential, I would defintiely want to be challenged by the standards done by my peers and the professor's demand for the quality of works at Oberlin. At Oberlin, the professors are passionate about their teaching and in-class discussion is important in the class, both are necessary for an in-depth philosophical study. As a philosophy major student, I expect to explore the widest range of ideas and cultures as possible. Oberlin' study away program would allow me to broaden my horizon and incorporate international elements in my academic studyl. Because of Oberlin's diverse student body, I could be exposed to diversity of opinions at Oberlin. I've heard of Oberlin's fantastic library, a perfect place for me to enjoy reading books by sitting on the comfortable womb chair.
Coming from a high school with high percentage of international students and an international student myself, I have been used to engage in intellectual clash with different people and learn the exciting things about them. Oberlin, a place with mosaic of different cultures and values, is a perfect match for me. I am particularly fascinated by Oberlin's singular housing program, and I plan to spend at least one semester in each of its cultures-theme housing programs before graduation.
Oberlin is the place where I could achieve my goals: to be an intellectual, a activitist and a global citizen who dedicate his life to the welfare of mankind. Oberlin would be a dream come true for me.
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I am also an active writer on the internet criticizing brutal treatment to animals.
I feel it is my mission and responsibility to help advance human civilization by broadening people's mindso n issues like gay and lesbian rights.
At Oberlin, the professors are passionate about their teaching and in-class discussion is important in the class, both are necessary for an in-depth philosophical study. awkward sentence here - definitely consider revising.
Oberlin' study away program would allow me to broaden my horizon and incorporate international elements in my academic studyl. there is no L in study :)
I have been used to engaging in intellectual clashes with different people and learn the exciting things about them.
I am particularly fascinated by Oberlin's singular housing program, and I plan to spend at least one semester in each of its culture-themed housing programs before graduation.
Oberlin is the place where I could achieve my goals: to be an intellectual, a activitist and a global citizen who will dedicate his life to the welfare of mankind.
