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Not a Typical Upbringing...Tufts Community Essay


shannon92 15 / 74  
Dec 25, 2009   #1
1. There is a Quaker saying: ''Let your life speak.'' Describe the environment in which you were raised--your family, home, neighborhood or community--and how it influenced the person you are today.

Everything about my home is quite eccentric; I live in a cute, hundred year old bungalow with a loud Irish family and bad acoustics. I am not part of a typical "Marin family," where parents work constantly and kids are over-scheduled to the point of insanity. Growing up, I often felt jealous of my peers, many of whom lived in beautiful homes in the hills, and whose parents forced them to participate in a ridiculous amount of sports, dance, and music. Maybe it's odd for a kid to want more overbearing parents, but I always felt as if I didn't measure up to my friends. Yet, as I grew up I began to realize that what I had was unique, and what shaped me into an interesting and self motivated person. When other kids were being forced to participate in the Nutcracker or soccer camp, I was taking it upon myself to figure out my interests. I was the one dragging my parents to sign me up for school plays, art lessons, and even Irish Step Dancing.

Funny, but I've found that many people whose parents forced them to take up piano lessons and learn foreign languages have quit, yet I continue to do what I love. Having had the wonderful opportunity to express myself in my own way, I've never relied on my parents to tell me what to do. While other kids are being nagged by their parents to do their work, I am completely self reliant and take responsibility for myself. Yes, on an average school night after finishing my schoolwork, you may find me in a dramatic engagement at the piano wrapped up in music from the Phantom of the Opera or singing "Defying Gravity" at the top of my lungs while teaching my brother the art of Irish Step Dancing, but that's what makes me who I am.

yf8651 16 / 31  
Dec 26, 2009   #2
Since the prompt is "Describe the environment in which you were raised--your family, home, neighborhood or community--and how it influenced the person you are today." I think describe the environment and describe the influence are equally important. However, you express so little about the first part, only several sentences.

Try to elaborate on it.
Good luck!
Mellzzer 1 / 14  
Dec 26, 2009   #3
I think you answered the prompt well :]

Funny, but I've found that many people whose parents forced them to take up piano lessons and learn foreign languages have quit, yet I continue to do what I love and have had the wonderful opportunity to express myself in my own way.

This is too long of a sentence I think. Tighten it up a bit since it just sounds like rambling the way it is now.

Otherwise, this is really good. It's original and has its own voice.
OP shannon92 15 / 74  
Dec 29, 2009   #4
is it okay if its 320 words, 1715 characters? it says 200 words/2000 characters on the commonapp... so i dont know which to follow, word count or character count
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Dec 29, 2009   #5
When you say you begged your parents to sign you up for those 3 activities, it implies that they resisted the idea. You would not have to beg if they were okay with the idea. Do you mean to convey that they stood in your way? Think about your purpose. What is useful about writing about an atypical childhood with parents who set an example of simplicity rather than so much busy running around? What does this kind of wisdom have to do with your chosen field of study? Focus on that.

Also... this sentence confused me.---> Maybe it's odd for a kid to want more overbearing parents, but I always felt as if I wasn't as good as other kids.

try making it clearer: Maybe it's odd for a kid to want more overbearing parents, but that is what happened for me in response to my parents' meditative, unhurried approach to life. I always felt as if I wasn't as good as other kids because I did not feel so much pressure. My parents alleviated pressure for me.


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