What is important to you? And why?
(max 250 words)
No other relationship has been as profound to my life as the one I have with my best friend. Though we are different in many levels, we balance each other in ways that bring out the best in both of us.
During my early middle school years, I was largely oblivious to what people around me were feeling. My friendships were based on similar interests and seating charts, not secrets and affection. I wasn't good at reading other people or connecting with them on an emotional level, so I found it difficult to empathize with a friend who was sad over a bad grade or angry after a fight with their parents. My best friend, on the other hand, was the opposite; while I felt too little, she felt too much. Unlike me, she cared about what people thought about her, which led to a struggle with insecurities and self-confidence.
When we became friends, we rubbed off of each other. Her compassion taught me to be more perceptive of other people's emotions, while she took after my nonchalance and learned to grow a thicker skin. She helped me navigate people, and in turn, I helped her navigate herself.
Now that we are about to go on our separate ways for university, I am scared that our bond might weaken due to circumstances that neither of us can control. No matter what happens, though, I'll continue to cherish what we've become to each other.
@student1710
Good work answering the prompt. My only feedback would be in the last 2 lines. Rather than saying "I am scared that our bond ..." you should instead express how she was a positive influence to you, and you'll deeply miss her friendship, as this would better apply to the question.
In the second paragraph, try to condense the explanation of your circumstances and who you are. This aspect of your life should've been answered in the "Who are you" question. Work on explaining the difficulties you faced and the nature of your best friend in fewer sentences. With this in mind, you should have more space to write a meaningful conclusion, focusing on how it makes you a unique applicant to UBC.
In the second paragraph,I was largely oblivious to what ... may be changed to I had forgotten a lot of how people felt like when they around me.
The meaning that you try to convey to the reader, it is understandable. The important thing is to make it more natural.
Don't give up ! ^_^
