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UBC Personal Profile questions. Who are you? A persistent and meticulous person.


Harrrrrrry 1 / -  
Jan 7, 2019   #1

Tell us about who you are.


How would your family, friends, and/or members of your community describe you? If possible, please include something about yourself that you are most proud of and why. (maximum 250 words)


Since I was a child, I have been an extremely persistent and meticulous person. My parents often refer to me as a "bulldog" because I never let go of my work unless it is done. Additionally, people around me would describe me "consistent" because I pursue work regardless of the hardship throughout the process.

For example, when I got into high school, I lighted my interest in mathematical studies. However, since I was not academically prepared for high school studies, I had a lot of work to catch up with my peers. Embarrassingly, I even had hard times completing homework on time. However, for the first few months of high school, as I reviewed elementary school and middle school math with my brother every day after school, I deliberately started to comprehend the materials taught in high school. As a result, my course marks gradually rose and I gained confidence in math classes. This did not only affect my academic excellence in math but also helped me establish a well-balanced studying habit after school. Furthermore, I decided to push myself even further, participating in the 2018 Euclid Mathematics Contest. I prepared for the contest by solving past contest questions and previous Olympiad questions at different perspectives from the official solutions. Consequently, I ranked in the top 25 percent of all competitors of the contest and received a certificate of recognition from the University of Waterloo. I am proud of this achievement since it reflects how much effort I put in.

Please comment any error(s) or things that I can improve! Thanks in advance.
Holt - / 7,651 1998  
Jan 7, 2019   #2
Harry, this essay will have a stronger opening if you immediately start with "My parents often refer to me as a bulldog..." Rather than the tired and often irritating "Since I was a child..." as reviewers tend to really dislike such over reaching statements. The statement that you used as the description coming from your parents is sheer perfection. Now, if only you could have supported it with a more concrete example of why they would call you that instead of the explanation that you offered. It would make for a more animated response. The same goes for the collective statement from your friends and community members. Examples always better highlight the explanation instead of a dry explanation of the meaning.

Now. I am not sure of the example you are using is the thing that you are most proud of because use the term "embarrassingly" in the presentation. So, maybe just remove that reference so that the narration will be firm on the "proud" side of the prompt? Yeah, that should work just fine. Between the suggested example improvements and a revised "proud of" paragraph, this essay should suit your needs just fine.



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